Self introduce Good moring,my dear teachers.Frankly speaking,this is the second time that I have visited XX University.And I was deeply impressed by your university on the last occasion.So this time I am extremely delighted to be given an opportunity

Self introduce Good moring,my dear teachers.Frankly speaking,this is the second time that I have visited XX University.And I was deeply impressed by your university on the last occasion.So this time I am extremely delighted to be given an opportunity
Self introduce
Good moring,my dear teachers.Frankly speaking,this is the second time that I have visited XX University.And I was deeply impressed by your university on the last occasion.So this time I am extremely delighted to be given an opportunity to attend this interview.
OK,now I’d like to introduce myself.
My name is XX,I am 27 years old.I come from Tangshan,a very famous heavy industrial city.I graduated from the Department of politics and history of Tangshan teacher’s college in june 2007.In the past two years I have been preparing for the postgraduate examination,While I have been working in the local subdistrict office.Actually from my high school days,I have cultivated a deep interest in philosophy,especially in Marxist philosophy.I have read some classical philosophical works by famous philosophers such as Karl Marx,Engels,Lenin,Feuerbach,Hegel and so on.And my two years’ working experience has enhanced my determination to take reaserch work on philosophical studies as my future career.Now all my hard work has got a result since I have a chance to be interviewed by you.
Well,In my spare time,I have broad interests like many other younsters.For instance,I like to play footbal,PingPon,reading books,traveling and making friends.And I often exchange views with other people by making comments in the forum on line.
I always believe that one will easily lag behind unless he keeps on learning.Of course,if I am given a chance to study in this famous university,I will spare no effort to devote my life to philosophy.
That’ all.Thank you!

Self introduce Good moring,my dear teachers.Frankly speaking,this is the second time that I have visited XX University.And I was deeply impressed by your university on the last occasion.So this time I am extremely delighted to be given an opportunity
按照话题来分段的,段与段的连接更清晰.提炼了你的主要观点,改写了前后段落,用词更加口语化,但是专业用词没变.当然,相对于你本人来说,改过后更彰显我的个性和风格.-- 譬如我只会给肯定的说法,不会用任何的否定词,特别是结尾定论时,更是如此.
--> Good morning,professors.This is my second time to visit XX University.I’ve done some homework checking up the academic environment here.Now I’m not only impressed by the academic performance of XX University,but also the scenery and beauty of the campus.It is my honor to be granted this interview opportunity.First and foremost,thank you so much for this opportunity.It is a great learning experience for me.
-->About myself.My name is XX,I am 27 years old.I come from Tangshan.I graduated from the Department of Politics and History of Tangshan Normal College in 2007.In the past two years,I work in the local district office as a 职位.At the same time,I have been focusing on the preparation of the Graduate Exam because I am well aware of the significance of further developing myself.
-->In terms of my research interest,I am very interested in philosophy,Marxist Philosophy in particular.I read some classical philosophical works by famous philosophers such as Karl Marx,Engels,Lenin,Feuerbach,Hegel in the past few years.My work never stops me from reading and studying.As a matter of fact,the two-year working experience has enhanced my determination to continue to study.It becomes more and more obvious to me that my passion of research is on philosophy.
-->When it comes to my lifestyle and hobby,I am a mix.I can be really active or quiet.I love sports:playing football,Ping-pong,hiking and travelling.I can also stay at home reading and studying for a long time.I love quality communication.I get easily involved in deep conversations with people who are older than me or people with lots of life experience and insights.Nowadays when time allows,I will go online and exchange ideas and viewpoints with other people online.
-->It is my belief that learning is unlimited,whereas life is.So,it is crucial to select what you love and make the commitment.Philosophy is my passion and I want to take it as my major.I would really appreciate if you can give me the opportunity to study here.You know (停顿半拍) as I know that we both know (微笑) this will be a good decision for both of us.
-->Thank you for your time.Wish you a great day.

Good morning, sirs. I am extremely delighted to be given an opportunity to attend this interview. As a matter of fact, this is my second visit to this University. And I was deeply impressed by the aca...

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Good morning, sirs. I am extremely delighted to be given an opportunity to attend this interview. As a matter of fact, this is my second visit to this University. And I was deeply impressed by the academic atmosphere of your university and its beautiful campus on my last visit about ( ) years ago.
句子作这样的先后次序安排较符合外国人的语序。
I would like to give a brief introduction about myself.
My name is XXX, I am 27 years old and I come from the city of Tangshan, which is famous for its heavy industries. I graduated from the Department of Politics and History of Tangshan Teachers' College in June 2007. In the past two years, I have been working in the local subdistrict office as a (post title). I have spent most of my spare time in preparing for the postgraduate examination as it has always been my intention to pursue further studies.
I choose Philosophy as my subject of further studies because I have cultivated a keen interested in philosophy since my high school days. I have read some classical philosophical works by famous philosophers such as Karl Marx, Engels, Lenin，Feuerbach, Hegel and so on. My two years’ working experience has further enhanced my determination to take research work on philosophical studies as my future career. To achieve this dream, I have been working hard to prepare myself over the past years and I am grateful that all my hard work has been well rewarded as I am able to sit here to be interviewed by you.
最后两段，楼上的articulate09 写得很好。
最后一句 "You know (停顿半拍) as I know that we both know (微笑) this will be a good decision for both of us"你可斟酌一下是否采用。

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