雅思作文200分求修改 求长期合作universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject.to what extent do you agree or disagree 作文In contemporary society,the question of whether the similar proportion of m

雅思作文200分求修改 求长期合作universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject.to what extent do you agree or disagree 作文In contemporary society,the question of whether the similar proportion of m
雅思作文200分求修改 求长期合作
universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject.to what extent do you agree or disagree
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In contemporary society,the question of whether the similar proportion of male and female students should be accepted by universities has been the topic of a great deal of people.
I personally agree that feminism should not be demonstrated by this way in the university.Most of universities are unquestionable having the male students much more than female students.That just as the impartial and national result of the way in which universities basing on the students' performance in their whole three years to choice them.
"The male and female should be offered same opportunity to get education." said by people taking the opposite argument.Given that the population of male and female is even not equal in some countries,why that should be equal in the universities?It is a common sight that boys do a great job in subjects such as the math ,physics and chemistry,but girls trend to the literature.Hence,they choice different type of majors basing on what they prefer,rather than the percentage of boys and girls.
There also have been some special subjects which only admit either male or female students.Taking the soldiers as the example.They aim to be trained stronger so that execute tasks efficiently.While the natural talent decides that the male is more suitable than the female in such subjects.So,it just prepares for the male students.
In conclusion ,universities accept same numbers of male and female students in every subject make no sense ,if universities do this ,then it would be unfair to whatever male or female students
希望能够指出我哪里写错或写得不好并修改
不要重新写一遍 那样就不是我自己的文章了
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雅思作文200分求修改 求长期合作universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject.to what extent do you agree or disagree 作文In contemporary society,the question of whether the similar proportion of m
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universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. to what extent do you agree or disagree ? 题目无误
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In contemporary society,the question of whether the similar proportion of male and female students should be accepted by universities has been the topic of a great deal of people.
I personally agree that feminism should not be demonstrated by (this way in the university 应改为 the universities in this way).Most of (去掉the) universities are unquestionable having the male students much more than female students that just as the impartial and national result of the way in which universities (are) basing on the students' performance in their whole three years to (choice 是 choose) them.

"The male and female should be offered (加 the) same opportunity to get education." (said by people taking the opposite argument应改为: said those who are taking the opposite views).Given that the population of male and female is (even not是 not even) equal in some countries, why (that should be equal in the universities改为 why should there be an equal number in the universities)? It is a common sight that boys do a great job in subjects such as the math(s),physics and chemistry, but girls (trend 是 tend) to (choose 或 prefer) the literature. Hence, they (choice是 choose) different type of majors basing on (what they prefer应改为: physical and characteristic difference between male and female), rather than the percentage of boys and girls.

There also have been some special subjects which only admit either male or female students
( for the above mentioned reasons). Taking the (soldiers改为 military course) as the example, they aim (to be trained stronger改为 at physically stronger beings) so that (加they could) execute tasks efficiently.While the natural talent decides that the male is more suitable than the female in such subjects. So, it just prepares for the male students.

In conclusion,universities accept same numbers of male and female students in every subject (make no sense或 would not make sense at all),if universities do this,then it would be unfair to whatever male or female students
尊重你的要求,我只顺序替你修改了错漏,或把句子换上更合适的表达法.原文仍然健在.

应该是Whether the community college should receive the same proportion of male and female students in a topic, and has been a big problem.
Personally, I agree that the University should accept female...

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应该是Whether the community college should receive the same proportion of male and female students in a topic, and has been a big problem.
Personally, I agree that the University should accept female students. Most universities more male students than female students. This is only the fairness of the outcome and the National University of students based on their performance in their full four years, this is the way they want to choose.
"The men and women should be provided the same opportunity to get an education." Said the man to take the opposite argument. Since the population of men and women, not even equal in some countries, and why the university should be equality? This is a common sight, the boys do a lot of work in subjects such as mathematics, physics and chemistry, but girls trends in the literature. Therefore, they choose different types of professional basis, what they like, and not because of who is more than less while the proportion of boys and girls who.
Then, there have been some special subjects only to recognize whether it is male or female students. Soldiers for example. The aim is to be trained in order to effectively carry out its mandate and done it well. Although this is only decided by the talent, the more suitable for men than women in such subjects. So, it is only suitable for male students. But not necessarily female students is necessary than we are lagging behind, and some girls are even stronger than we are in this regard, so the country should not be "patriarchal". Population distribution is equal, if you have been such a development continues, the consequences will be disastrous.
In short, the University received the same number of male and female students in each subject, if the University is doing makes no sense, it would be unfair, whether male or female students, should have the right to receive education. 我给你加了几段。有些改了一下。你少了这个关键词patriarchal。
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你少了这个关键词patriarchal。