请问这句话有问题吗?我自己写的.如下.要是有问题的话怎么改呢?用简单点的方式we can see the contribution of each city dweller’ income to GDP figure even more doubled the countryside dweller’s.
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请问这句话有问题吗?我自己写的.如下.要是有问题的话怎么改呢?用简单点的方式we can see the contribution of each city dweller’ income to GDP figure even more doubled the countryside dweller’s.
请问这句话有问题吗?我自己写的.如下.要是有问题的话怎么改呢?用简单点的方式
we can see the contribution of each city dweller’ income to GDP figure even more doubled the countryside dweller’s.
请问这句话有问题吗?我自己写的.如下.要是有问题的话怎么改呢?用简单点的方式we can see the contribution of each city dweller’ income to GDP figure even more doubled the countryside dweller’s.
个人建议如下：
1. we can see the contribution 似乎语法有错,应该改为we can see that the contribution.
2. city dweller 和 countryside dweller 是否指定要用的词语?如果不是,请考虑改用 urban dweller 和 rural dweller,因为这两个词似乎比楼主所用的词较常见.
3. each city dweller's income 可否改为 average income of urban dwellers 或 per capita income of urban dwellers,因为这个说法貌似较专业.
4. GDP figure 可否改为 GDP,因为只用 GDP 一词已经能表达清楚,而figure 一字似乎不起任何作用.省去它可能会令句子更清爽.
5. even more doubled the countryside dweller’s 似乎语法有错,应该改为 was more than double in comparison with that of the countryside dwellers.
整句而言,若要尽量按照楼主原句的结构,则建议改为：
We can see that the contribution of the urban dwellers' average income to GDP is more than double in comparason with that of the rural dwellers.
若无需依照楼主原句的结构,那麼,我个人较喜欢改成下面那样子：
We can see that the per capita income of the urban dwellers contributed more than doubly to GDP in comparison with their rural counterparts.