请帮我英语批改作文Everyone has hobby .Everyon~s hobby doesn~t different.I have a hobby ,too .my hobby is collecting old coins.i think collect old coins it is very interesting.i have been collecting old coins three and a half years.now i have

请帮我英语批改作文Everyone has hobby .Everyon~s hobby doesn~t different.I have a hobby ,too .my hobby is collecting old coins.i think collect old coins it is very interesting.i have been collecting old coins three and a half years.now i have
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Everyone has hobby .Everyon~s hobby doesn~t different.I have a hobby ,too .my hobby is collecting old coins.i think collect old coins it is very interesting.i have been collecting old coins three and a half years.now i have 200 of them .collecting old coins make me very happy .i would like to start an old coins~club.

请帮我英语批改作文Everyone has hobby .Everyon~s hobby doesn~t different.I have a hobby ,too .my hobby is collecting old coins.i think collect old coins it is very interesting.i have been collecting old coins three and a half years.now i have
Everyone has hobbies and hobbies are different for everyone.I do have one hobby,too,which is colllecting old coins.I think it is interesting to collect the old coins and I have been doing this for three and half years already.By now I have collected 200 of old coins.Collecting of old coins makes me really happy and I am thinking to initiate an "old coins collection" club.
收集旧币的英文形态出现太多次,必须有意的转变为代词,句子才不会冗长.

does not要改成is not,collecting改成原型，think本身是动词，所以不能接collect的原型，可以接ing形式，make是在collect后面，本身是动词，所以要用过去分词的形式，would like相当于want to所以不接to的形式，后面接原型，其他的可以

Everyone has hobbies .Everyone~s hobbies aren't different. I have a hobby . My hobby is collecting old coins. I think collecting old coins is very interesting. I have been collecting old coins for thr...

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Everyone has hobbies .Everyone~s hobbies aren't different. I have a hobby . My hobby is collecting old coins. I think collecting old coins is very interesting. I have been collecting old coins for three and a half years. Now I have 200 of them . Collecting old coins makes me very happy . I would like to set up a collecting old coins club.

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