可以帮忙看看这段话的语法问题吗Wirte a 250-word essay ahout the possible advantages of an elderly person living in a special residential house.In the first part,present your point of view.In the second part,use examples from your life e

可以帮忙看看这段话的语法问题吗Wirte a 250-word essay ahout the possible advantages of an elderly person living in a special residential house.In the first part,present your point of view.In the second part,use examples from your life e
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Wirte a 250-word essay ahout the possible advantages of an elderly person living in a special residential house.In the first part,present your point of view.In the second part,use examples from your life experience to support your claim.In the third part,reiterate your viewpoint.
Living in the residential house
It seems to me that elderly person living in a special residential house is a good choice.As China is becoming an old-age society.How to give elderly person a comfortable habitat and how to be responsible to them is becoming a more and more vital problem at this time.Whereas,from some recently reports we can concern that we need take more pains to focus on these questions because many senior citizens can not be assured that their rights.
So,if there is a place that elderly citizens would ensure their regular life,that is residential house.I used to have an experience to visit a residential house,I was surprised by their good services.For instance,they provide a special physical examination to the older in order to guarantee their body in a good condition.Besides,I found older people in there would not be lonely than they live in their own house,apparently their daughters or sons might be busy in working to support their family,they could not have many times to look after their parents.However,these circumstance would not talk place in the residential house.Elderly people could take part some activities and make friends in this place.From where I stand those would not make them feel lonely,and it was good for their health.
In summary,as many parents only have one child in this time,their child may have no time to care them.I suggest that elderly person are better prefer to live in the residential house than depend on their child to look after them.To some extent,elderly person will be more taken care of in that house.

可以帮忙看看这段话的语法问题吗Wirte a 250-word essay ahout the possible advantages of an elderly person living in a special residential house.In the first part,present your point of view.In the second part,use examples from your life e
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Living in the residential house
As my view, living in a special residential houses seems be a good option. Today China is becoming an old-age society. How to offer elderly people a comfortable habitat and undertake responsibility for them is becoming more and more important at this time. However, by learning from some recent reports we realized it's still long way to go before we face this problem directly, because so many senior citizens' rights are still unsecured.
So, if there is really a place where elderly citizens could ensure a decent life, that is the residential houses we needed. I visited this kind of residential houses once and was surprised by the comprehensive facilities and services. For instance, they conduct a special health check for those elders in order to make sure their body is in good condition. Besides, I found elder people of them would not be lonely compare with their living in own families. Their daughters or sons maybe very busy for work in order to support their family, then they could not have enough time to look after their parents. However, this situation will not happen in the residential houses. Elderly people can take part in many activities and make friends here. From where I stand those would not make them feel lonely, and it was good for their health.
In summary, as many parents only have one child in this time, their child may have no time to take care of them. I suggest that elderly person should live in the residential houses to relieve their children's burden. To some extent, elderly person will get better care in that houses.

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Write a 250-word essay ahout the possible advantages of an elderly person living in a special residential house.In the first part,present your point of view.In the second part,use example...

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改过之后的如下：
Write a 250-word essay ahout the possible advantages of an elderly person living in a special residential house.In the first part,present your point of view.In the second part,use examples from your life experience to support your claim.In the third part, reiterate your viewpoint.
Living in the residential house
It seems to me that elderly person living in a special residential house is a good choice.As China is becoming an old-age society.How to give elderly people a comfortable habitat and how to be responsible to them are becoming more and more vital at this time.Whereas,from some recent reports we should concern that we need to take more pains to focus on these questions because many senior citizens can not be assured for their rights.
So,if there is a place that elderly citizens could ensure their regular life,it must be residential house.I used to have experience visiting a residential house,I was surprised at their good services.For instance,they provided a special physical examination to the older in order to guarantee their body in a good condition.Besides,I found older people there would not be lonely than living in their own house,apparently their daughters or sons might be busy in working to support their family,they could not have much time to look after their parents.However,these circumstances would not take place in the residential houses.Elderly people could take part in some activities and make friends in this place.From where I stand on which would not make them feel lonely,and it was good for their health.
In summary,as many parents only have one child in this time,their child may have no time to care them.I suggest that elderly person had better live in the residential house than depending on being looked after by their children.To some extent,elderly person will be better taken care of in that house.
说实话我写不出这么好的文章，不过里面的一些错误还是找得出的，其实问题也不大，都是一些时态、单复数的小错误，都帮你改好了，整篇文章很赞！

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