一段自我介绍,麻烦各位看一下有没有什么语法错误或不合适的词语,结尾要不要加什么总结的句子……谢谢!Hello,every teacher.My name is Ann.I’m from Xinhua Middle School,and I’m fourteen years old.I’m happy t

一段自我介绍,麻烦各位看一下有没有什么语法错误或不合适的词语,结尾要不要加什么总结的句子……谢谢!Hello,every teacher.My name is Ann.I’m from Xinhua Middle School,and I’m fourteen years old.I’m happy t
一段自我介绍,麻烦各位看一下有没有什么语法错误或不合适的词语,结尾要不要加什么总结的句子……谢谢!Hello,every teacher.My name is Ann.I’m from Xinhua Middle School,and I’m fourteen years old.I’m happy to get a chance to enter the competition.But in fact,I was feeling nervous before I speak.So my mother told me to take a deep breath.Now,I feel relax,so I think it’s a good idea and my mother is great.I have a small family,my father,mother and me,and we love each other.I have some hobbies,such as reading,painting,listening to music; I think hobbies always can make us grow as a person,develop our interests and help us learn new skills.I always spend some of my free time to do sports,and I playing volleyball for my school team.Because I think sports is very important for our health.And I also like going shopping or having a picnic with friends on a clear day,I believe friendship always make us feel happy and relax.So I have lots of friends now.

一段自我介绍,麻烦各位看一下有没有什么语法错误或不合适的词语,结尾要不要加什么总结的句子……谢谢!Hello,every teacher.My name is Ann.I’m from Xinhua Middle School,and I’m fourteen years old.I’m happy t
看来你是要参加一个比赛吧 给你改一下 直接发改后的好了
Hello,every teacher.My name is Ann.I’m from Xinhua Middle School,and I’m fourteen years old.I’m happy to get a chance to take part in the competition.To be honest,I felt a bit nervous before I speak.But my mother told me to take a deep breath.Now,I feel more relax,and I think it’s a good idea and my mother is great.I have a small family,my father,mother and me,and we love each other.I have some hobbies,such as reading,painting,listening to music; I think hobbies can always make us grow as a person,develop our interests and help us learn new skills.I always spend some of my free time to do sports,because I think sports is very important for our health.And I am in my school volleyball team.I also like going shopping or having a picnic with friends on a clear day,I believe friendship can always make us feel happy and relax.I am proud that I have lots of friends now.
这上面是给你改过的 发现你比较喜欢用so but 这一些连词 所以句式有点重复 要尽量用一些不同的举行来表达
还有如果是自我介绍就有些不完整了 最好再说一说你对英语的喜爱 之类的
最后结尾：Archimedes said,"Give me a place to stand and I will move the Earth," and I want to say：Give me a chance and I will show you the best of me!
然后Thank you 就好了