帮忙看看英文作业的语法和用法错误,The Power of Sports to American CultureThesis statement:Sports reflect American culture through different angles; for example,sports define the American dream in special ways,sports lead the public fas

帮忙看看英文作业的语法和用法错误,The Power of Sports to American CultureThesis statement:Sports reflect American culture through different angles; for example,sports define the American dream in special ways,sports lead the public fas
帮忙看看英文作业的语法和用法错误,
The Power of Sports to American Culture
Thesis statement:Sports reflect American culture through different angles; for example,sports define the American dream in special ways,sports lead the public fashions,and sports explain why Americans always battle to the last moment.
Topic 1:American dream
Sports define the American dream through their special methods.American dream,the most famous national ethos of the USA,tells that everyone can achieve a better,richer,and happier life only through his or her diligent work in this piece of land; and this is what sports show to public every day.Transferring from nobody to somebody isn’t an isolated instance in sports world; in contrast,it happens every year,every season,and even every game.Almost all super stars experienced it,such as Ming Yao.Ming Yao,playing the center for the Houston Rockets since 2002,is well-known as one of the best center in NBA.However,before he entered the NBA,no one knew him in the United States.Even Charles Barkley,TNT’s commentator,said he would kiss the other commentator’s ass only if Yao could score more than 19 points in one of his rookie-season games.Then he kissed something’s ass.Nowadays,Yao owns the Shanghai Shark team,a music website,and several chain restaurants; in addition,he is a billionaire now.Basketball acts the most important role that helped him to achieve his success.
Sports and fashions
Sports stars lead Americans’ fashion preferences and tastes.Those world famous brands would have sports stars as their spokespersons.For example,Pepsi would like to ask the whole soccer team as its spokesmen.Sooner,Pepsi became the most common beverage which was served for high school boys after their soccer games.Nowadays,Nike and Addidas helped many NBA’s super stars to launch their own shoes such as Michael Jordan’s Air Jordan,and Lebron James’ Air James.If parents ask their high school boy what does he want to get for his birthday?Maybe the answer will be a pair of basketball shoes because the sports fashions is much important than those Paris’ fashions to teenagers.And public media would like to focus on those popular sports stars and their partners.For example,David Beckham and his wife Victoria Beckham are also well-known as fashion leaders in the eyes of public; they spoke for many brands together,such as Emporio Armani.

帮忙看看英文作业的语法和用法错误,The Power of Sports to American CultureThesis statement:Sports reflect American culture through different angles; for example,sports define the American dream in special ways,sports lead the public fas
Line 3:"sports lead the public fashion" (it sounds weird if you use "fashions",the plural version of "fashion" is very unusual)
Line 8-9:"and this is what sports show to [the] public every day."
Line 18:"Basketball acts [as] the most important role that helped him to achieve his success."
Line 19:"Sports and fashion" (again,there is no need for the plural,I don't even think the word "fashion" is countable)
Line 20:"Sports stars led Americans’ fashion preferences and tastes." (Instead of 'lead',you should use 'led'.)
Line 20:"World famous brands." ("Those" can be omitted.)
Line 21-23:"For example,Pepsi had asked a whole soccer team as its spokesmen.Soon enough,it became the most common beverage which was served for high school boys after their soccer games." (Lots of grammatical mistakes,corrected to the best of my ability without changing too much of your wordings or contents.)
Line 25-27:"If parents asked their high school boy what he wanted for his birthday,the answer may well be a pair of basketball shoes.To teenagers,sports fashion are much more important than those in Paris." (Again,fixed sentence structures and wording.)
Line 27:"Public media..." ("And" is omitted.)

The Power of Sports to American Culture
Thesis statement: Sports reflect American culture through（from） different angles; for example, sports define the American dream in special ways, sports lea...

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The Power of Sports to American Culture
Thesis statement: Sports reflect American culture through（from） different angles; for example, sports define the American dream in special ways, sports lead the public fashions, and sports explain why Americans （不要加S） always battle to（改成at） the last moment.
Topic 1: American dream
Sports define the American dream through their special methods. American dream, the most famous national ethos of the USA, tells(tells改成telling) that everyone can achieve a better, richer, and happier life only through his or her diligent work in（不能说diligent work 直接用diligence就可以了，in改成on） this piece of land; and this is what sports show(改成what sports want to show会好点 ) to public every day. Transferring from nobody to somebody isn’t an isolated instance in sports world; in contrast, it happens every year, every season, and even every game. Almost all super stars experienced it, such as Ming Yao. Ming Yao, playing the center for the Houston Rockets since 2002, is well-known as one of the best center in NBA. However, before he entered the NBA, no one knew him in the United States. Even Charles Barkley, TNT’s commentator, said he would kiss the other commentator’s ass only if Yao could score more than 19 points in one of his rookie-season games. Then he kissed something’s ass. Nowadays, Yao owns the Shanghai Shark team, a music website, and several chain restaurants; in addition, he is a billionaire now. Basketball acts (加上as) the most important role that helped him to achieve his success.
Sports and fashions
Sports stars lead Americans’ fashion preferences and tastes. Those world famous brands would have sports stars as their spokespersons. For example, Pepsi would like to ask the whole soccer team as(ask ……as不要这样搭配，as改成become吧) its spokesmen. Sooner, Pepsi became the most common beverage which was served for high school boys after their soccer games. Nowadays, Nike and Addidas helped many NBA’s super stars to（去掉to） launch their own shoes such as Michael Jordan’s Air Jordan ,(这个标点省略) and Lebron James’ Air James. If parents ask their high school boy（boy加S） what does he(do they) want to get for his birthday? Maybe the answer will be a pair of basketball shoes because the sports fashions is much important than those Paris’ fashions to teenagers. And public media would like to focus on those popular sports stars and their partners. For example, David Beckham and his wife Victoria Beckham are also well-known as fashion leaders in the eyes of public; they spoke for many brands together, such as Emporio Armani.

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The Power of Sports to American Culture
Thesis statement: Sports reflect American culture through different angles; for example, sports define the American dream in speci...

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经过细致，周密的修改，终成此稿，请参考：
The Power of Sports to American Culture
Thesis statement: Sports reflect American culture through different angles; for example, sports define the American dream in special ways, lead the public fashions, and explain why Americans always battle to the last moment.
Topic 1: American dream
Sports define the American dream through their special methods. American dream, the most famous national ethos of the USA, tells that everyone can achieve a better, richer, and happier life as long as through his or her diligent work in this piece of land, which is what sports show to the public every day. Transferring from nobody to somebody isn’t an uncommon instance in sports world; in contrast, it happens every year, every season, and even every game. Almost all super stars experienced it, such as Ming Yao, who, playing the center for the Houston Rockets since 2002, is well-known as one of the best player in NBA. However, before his entering into the NBA, no one knew him in the United States. Even Charles Barkley, TNT’s commentator, said he would kiss the other commentator’s ass if Yao could score more than 19 points in one of his rookie-season games, then he kissed something’s ass. Nowadays, Yao is already a billionaire now, owning the Shanghai Shark team, a music website, and several chain restaurants; Basketball acts the most important role in helping him achieve his success.
Sports and fashions
Besides, Sports stars also lead Americans’ fashion preferences and tastes. Those world famous brands would have sports stars as their spokesmen. For example, Pepsi would like to invite the whole soccer team as its spokesmen. Before long, Pepsi became the most common beverage among high school youth. In addition, Nike and Adidas helped many NBA’s super stars to launch their own shoes such as Michael Jordan’s Air Jordan, and Lebron James’ Air James. If parents ask their high school boys what he wants to have for his birthday? Perhaps the answer would be a pair of basketball shoes because the sports fashion is much more compelling than those Paris’ fashions to teenagers. Furthermore, mass media is keen on those popular sports stars and their partners. For instance, David Beckham and his wife Victoria Beckham are also well-known as fashion leaders in the eyes of public, and they spoke for many brands, such as Emporia Armani.

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