我写了一篇作文,请大家帮忙看看哪里需要改的,Directions:Write a 120-word composition entitled "Stress".You should write according to the outline given below.1.压力是生活的一部分；2.压力的利与弊；3.如何对付压力

我写了一篇作文,请大家帮忙看看哪里需要改的,Directions:Write a 120-word composition entitled "Stress".You should write according to the outline given below.1.压力是生活的一部分；2.压力的利与弊；3.如何对付压力
我写了一篇作文,请大家帮忙看看哪里需要改的,
Directions:Write a 120-word composition entitled "Stress".You should write according to the outline given below.
1.压力是生活的一部分；2.压力的利与弊；3.如何对付压力
以下是我写的,
Stress
Nowdays stress raises along with the rapid developmentof econermic.In the modernization city,stress comes form different areas,such as employment,life,work and competition and so on.It has become a part of our life.
Yet there is advantage and disadvantage of stress to people.On the one hand,stress can encourage the one to make more progressing.Stress can also make people be confidence in life."No stess,no motivation"as the saying goes.On the other hand,stress may affect people's emotion and health,make their be low-spirited.They may negetively.In a word,stress is bad for people.
Since there is no way to avoid stress,we need to find ways to cope it.First,we should have the right kind of attitude towards stess.We should not take stress as something we unwanted,but transfer it as a motivator.Second,we should never let the stress out to control.Third,we should learn the art of relaxation to help relieve stess.
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我写了一篇作文,请大家帮忙看看哪里需要改的,Directions:Write a 120-word composition entitled "Stress".You should write according to the outline given below.1.压力是生活的一部分；2.压力的利与弊；3.如何对付压力
Nowadays stress raises along with the rapid development of economic.In the modernization city,stress comes from different areas,such as employment,life,work and competition and so on.It has become a part of our life.
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Yet stress has advantage and disadvantage to people.On one hand,stress can encourage the one to make more progress.Stress can also make people be confident in life."No stess,no motivation"as the saying goes.On the other hand,stress may affect people's emotion and health.It makes them be low-spirited.They may be negetive.In a word,stress is bad for people.
Since there is no way to avoid stress,we need to find ways to cope with it.Firstly, we should have positive attitude towards stess.We should not take stress as something we unwanted,but change it as a motivator. Secondly, we should never let the stress out of control.Thirdly, we should learn the art of relaxation to help relieve a motivator.
等级考试很累人的,简单单词要准确,短语要精确.写的还行!

写的对，但是有些wording写错了。
Nowdays 是 Now days
It has become a part of our life. 不要用has了，become已经代表has.
Yet there is advantage and disadvantage of stress to people. 那个is要改成are.
"No stess,no...

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写的对，但是有些wording写错了。
Nowdays 是 Now days
It has become a part of our life. 不要用has了，become已经代表has.
Yet there is advantage and disadvantage of stress to people. 那个is要改成are.
"No stess,no motivation"as the saying goes 不用as the saying goes on。
On the other hand,stress may affect people's emotion and health,make their be low-spirited. 那个make their be low-spirited,要改成On the other hand, stress may affect people's emotion and health, as result it make them low-spirited.
First, we should have the right kind of attitude towards stess. 那个we should have 改成 we need
Third, we should learn the art of relaxation to help relieve stess. 用last, 因为那是你最后的sentence.

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