大家帮我看看我的英文简历 写的有什么不对的地方Resume Name:***Sex:male Date of Birth:1981/10/15 Residency:SHENYANG Zip Code:110179 Email:*** Mobile:** Self Assessment:After being Software Engineer two years,I understand computer I

大家帮我看看我的英文简历 写的有什么不对的地方Resume Name:***Sex:male Date of Birth:1981/10/15 Residency:SHENYANG Zip Code:110179 Email:*** Mobile:** Self Assessment:After being Software Engineer two years,I understand computer I
大家帮我看看我的英文简历 写的有什么不对的地方
Resume
Name:***Sex:male
Date of Birth:1981/10/15 Residency:SHENYANG
Zip Code:110179
Email:***
Mobile:**
Self Assessment:
After being Software Engineer two years,I understand computer Industry again.During the two years,I learned a lot of IT skill and good ability to study,logistic analysis and expression.This build up my confidence.I knowed that English is very important to a IT person,I study in my spare time.So I am an active,innovative man,a good team-worker.
Career Objective:
Desired Industry:Computers
Desired Location:BEIJING ,SHANGHAI ,SHENZHEN ,DALIAN ,SHENYANG
Desired Salary:NEGOTIABLE
Position Wanted:Senior Software Engineer ,Software Engineer ,System Engineer ,Database Engineer ,Project Manager
Work Experience
2005/03--Present：Being Computers Software Engineer at ***.
Education
2001/09--2005/07：Jilin University college of computer science and technology
2003/01 CET4
Language Skills
English GOOD
Chinese EXCELLENT
Thank you for reading.

大家帮我看看我的英文简历 写的有什么不对的地方Resume Name:***Sex:male Date of Birth:1981/10/15 Residency:SHENYANG Zip Code:110179 Email:*** Mobile:** Self Assessment:After being Software Engineer two years,I understand computer I
日期最好这样表示:Dec.15th,1981
改完后的Self Assessment:
After being Software Engineer for two years,I have a better understanding on computer Industry.During the two years,I learned a lot of IT skills and good abilities,including Logistic Analysis and Expression.This builds up my confidence.I knowed that English is very important to a IT person,so I study in my spare time,and now I am an active,innovative man as well as a good team-worker.
最后一句:Thank you for your patience.
没有什么大的问题了..:)

最好加上work experience

skill-skills
this-these
书面自我介绍貌似长句比较formal.
个人意见哦
PS，基本信息不用写邮编...姓名性别联系方式户口就行了
有些公司要求户口的

可以做范文了 谢谢

English GOOD？？
-_-;