这句话有没语病my winter was done,and I was like a migratory bird flew across the sky,meeting the golden rays of the morning sun.
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这句话有没语病my winter was done,and I was like a migratory bird flew across the sky,meeting the golden rays of the morning sun.
这句话有没语病
my winter was done,and I was like a migratory bird flew across the sky,meeting the golden rays of the morning sun.
这句话有没语病my winter was done,and I was like a migratory bird flew across the sky,meeting the golden rays of the morning sun.
2个地方
flew - flying
meeting - met with 我觉得应该是被动,不是我主动去见,而是飞上天空遇见的
morning sun名词修饰名词作定语没问题
was done 改为 was over. morning 不是形容词
flew--flying
我的逆镜已经过去了,我就像一只迁徙的小鸟在天空穿越飞行,在早晨的阳光中享受着黄金般的日光浴.
done是对了的，flew 应该改成flying，后面对了的
没什么语病哦
开始表示的“结束”的意思，个人觉得用gone比较好；中间的“flew"，因为鸟跟飞是主动的关系，所以用ing的形式才是正确的；最后的晨光，个人觉得用dawning较合适；
my winter had gone, and i was like a migratory bird flying across the sky, meeting the golden rays of dawning....
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开始表示的“结束”的意思，个人觉得用gone比较好；中间的“flew"，因为鸟跟飞是主动的关系，所以用ing的形式才是正确的；最后的晨光，个人觉得用dawning较合适；
my winter had gone, and i was like a migratory bird flying across the sky, meeting the golden rays of dawning.
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