英语老师进来下.请为这篇作文打分 有什么不足或错误的地方 请指出..In the passage ,the author tried to tell us children needing their parents’ direction,parents should sit down as well as talk with them about what they shou

英语老师进来下.请为这篇作文打分 有什么不足或错误的地方 请指出..In the passage ,the author tried to tell us children needing their parents’ direction,parents should sit down as well as talk with them about what they shou
英语老师进来下.请为这篇作文打分 有什么不足或错误的地方 请指出..
In the passage ,the author tried to tell us children needing their parents’ direction,parents should sit down as well as talk with them about what they should do and should not do.
As for me ,parents should be responsible for children‘s action .Because children’s life is gaven by parent .If parents don't teach and ignore children ,they will make a lot of mistakes .I remember my childhood .My parent was too busy to stay at home so that I used to stay at home alone .One day ,I was so bored that I wanted to break something which is in my home .Quickly,I saw a cup .And then ,I went to catch and throw it at wall .Finally ,the cup broken made me hurt .If parent teached me before it happen ,it had no thing .
I have stuggestions for parents .Frist ,parents should often talk with children about what they are allowed to do and forbidden to do .Second,parents should become children's model.
题目是第一篇 .本人的基础比较烂...所以想狂补一下英语..毕竟要高考了...
25分的作文能拿到 15分就好.

英语老师进来下.请为这篇作文打分 有什么不足或错误的地方 请指出..In the passage ,the author tried to tell us children needing their parents’ direction,parents should sit down as well as talk with them about what they shou
大概帮你改了一下,你可以对照原文看一下改的地方.祝你学习进步!
In the passage , the author tried to tell us that children neeed their parents’ direction and parents should sit down talk with them about what they should do and should not do as well.
As for me , parents should be responsible for children‘s behaviour . If parents don't teach but ignore children , they will make a lot of mistakes . I still remember my childhood . My parent was too busy to stay at home so that I used to stay at home alone . One day , I was so bored that I wanted to break something in the room . Soon, I a cup came into my sight . I went to catch and throw it at wall . As a result , the broken pieces of the cup made me hurt . If my parent had taught me before, such things wouldn't have happened.
I have some stuggestions for parents . First , parents should often talk with children about what they are allowed to do and forbidden to do . Second, parents should become children's model.