帮我改改语法错误,If we legalize drugs,drugs will be controlled by the government.Firstly the government will know drugs direction.They will know how many drugs are used for medical,how many people use drugs,and who buys them.Once the governme

帮我改改语法错误,If we legalize drugs,drugs will be controlled by the government.Firstly the government will know drugs direction.They will know how many drugs are used for medical,how many people use drugs,and who buys them.Once the governme
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If we legalize drugs,drugs will be controlled by the government.Firstly the government will know drugs direction.They will know how many drugs are used for medical,how many people use drugs,and who buys them.Once the government gets that information,they can control drugs very easy.On the other hand,the government will use new laws to control drugs.If drugs are legalized,there will be a whole new set of laws.For example,person cannot buy drugs if they under 21; agents can't sell drugs to kids; employers should be able to discriminate against drug users; employers should be able to conduct drug tests,and they should not have to comply with the American with Disabilities Act.Gary E.Johnson said,“Do drugs and do crime?Make it like a gun.Enhance the penalty for the crime in the same way we do today with guns (Johnson 275).”
Youths will be protected under drug’s legalization in two reasons.First,youths will get drugs harder than before.When the suppliers are easy to sell the product legally,they do not want to sell the product illegal.For example,we had age limitation for the people who purchase alcohol and tabaco.We only can purchase them when we meet age limitation.It is a good way to control the youths with the alcohol and tabaco.We can use the same way to control the drags also.Second,it is better for drugs are going to be sold by people who check ID than by drug dealers who don't.If youths get drugs from a drug dealer,nobody can promise the drug’s quality.Maybe it mixes with other bad ingredients.However,if the drugs sell in the supermarkets as alcohol,it will protect youths to get drugs with quality insurance.All in all,youths will be protected under drug’s legalization.
Drug’s legalization will reduce crime.As drugs are illegal to purchase,the demand is larger than supply,the price of drugs is very high.It is one of the reasons about high criminal rate.“It is the high price of drugs that leads addicts to robbery,murder,and other crimes,says lra Glasser,executive director of the American Civil Liberties Union.(Bennett 286).” If drugs are legal to purchase,the supply of drugs are increasing,and then the price of the drugs will decrease.As a result,less people will get do crime.
Finally,drugs legalization will reduce government expenditure.Legalization would free up billions of dollars that the government now spends on police,courts,and corrections to wage war on drugs and would produce significant tax revenues.The policemen will have more time to focus on speeding violations,burglaries,and other offenses that law enforcement now lacks the opportunity to enforce.

帮我改改语法错误,If we legalize drugs,drugs will be controlled by the government.Firstly the government will know drugs direction.They will know how many drugs are used for medical,how many people use drugs,and who buys them.Once the governme
我就直接把改好的粘上来好了,看文章不容易If we legalize drugs,drugs will be controlled by the government:
The most obvious change is that the government will know drugs direction.They will know how many drugs are used for medical,how many people use drugs,and how many people purchase them and who are they.Once the government gets these information,drugs may be controlled in a much easier way.On the other hand,(我没找到你的on the one hand)the government will use new laws to control drugs.If drugs are legalized,there will be a new whole set of laws about it.For instance,teenagers and those adults under 21 cannot buy drugs; also agents are not allowed to sell dope to kids; employers will be able to show discrimination to drug abuser(话说这可能吗,哪个employer会主动要吸毒的员工); employers will be able to conduct drug tests,and they should not have to comply with the American with Disabilities Act.Gary E.Johnson said,“Do drugs and do crime?Make it like a gun.Enhance the penalty for the crime in the same way we do today with guns (Johnson 275).”
Youths will be protected under drug’s legalization in two reasons.On the first side,getting drugs becomes much harder for them.When the suppliers can sell the product legally,they will never be willing to sell the product illegal(why if they can get much more benefits?you know that).Let me show you an example,we had age limitation for the people who purchase alcohol and tabaco.We cannot purchase them when we haven't meet the age limitation.It is a good way to control the youths who are abused with the alcohol and tabaco.The same comes for the drugs.On the other side,it is much better for us to konw that drugs will be be sold by people who check ID rahter than by drug dealers who don't.If youths get drugs from a drug dealer,nobody can promise the drug’s quality(我比较好奇你的drug是毒dope还是药品).Maybe it is mixed with other bad ingredients.However,if the drugs can be selled in the supermarkets as alcohol,it will protect youths to get drugs with quality insurance.To make it short,youths will be protected under drug’s legalization.
Drug’s legalization can reduce crime.As drugs are illegal to purchase,while the demand is larger than supply,the price of drugs is very high.It is one of the reasons for high criminal rate.“It is the high price of drugs that leads addicts to robbery,murder,and other crimes,says lra Glasser,executive director of the American Civil Liberties Union.(Bennett 286).” If drugs are legal to purchase,the supply of drugs are increasing,and then the price of the drugs will decrease.As a result,less crime shall appear.
Finally,drugs legalization will reduce government expenditure.Legalization would free up billions of dollars that the government now spends on police,courts,and corrections to wage war on drugs and it would produce significant tax revenues.The policemen will have more time to focus on speeding violations,burglaries,and other offenses that law enforcement which now lacks the opportunity to enforce.
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If we legalize drugs, drugs will be controlled by the government. Firstly the government will know drugs direction. They will know how many drugs are used for medical, how many people use drugs, and who buys them. Once the government gets that information, they can control drugs very easy. On the other hand, the government will use new laws to control drugs. If drugs are legalized, there will be a whole new set of laws. For example, person cannot buy drugs if they under 21; agents can't sell drugs to kids; employers should be able to discriminate against drug users; employers should be able to conduct drug tests, and they should not have to comply with the American with Disabilities Act. Gary E. Johnson said, “Do drugs and do crime? Make it like a gun. Enhance the penalty for the crime in the same way we do today with guns (Johnson 275).”
Youths will be protected under drug’s legalization in two reasons. First, youths will get drugs harder than before. When the suppliers are easy to sell the product legally, they do not want to sell the product illegal. For example, we had age limitation for the people who purchase alcohol and tobacco. We only can purchase them when we meet age limitation. It is a good way to control the youths with the alcohol and tobacco. We can use the same way to control the drags also. Second, it is better for drugs are going to be sold by people who check ID than by drug dealers who don't. If youths get drugs from a drug dealer, nobody can promise the drug’s quality. Maybe it mixes with other bad ingredients. However, if the drugs sell in the supermarkets as alcohol, it will protect youths to get drugs with quality insurance. All in all, youths will be protected under drug’s legalization.
Drug’s legalization will reduce crime. As drugs are illegal to purchase, the demand is larger than supply, the price of drugs is very high. It is one of the reasons about high criminal rate. “It is the high price of drugs that leads addicts to robbery, murder, and other crimes, says lira Glaser, executive director of the American Civil Liberties Union. (Bennett 286).” If drugs are legal to purchase, the supply of drugs are increasing, and then the price of the drugs will decrease. As a result, less people will get do crime.
Finally, drugs legalization will reduce government expenditure. Legalization would free up billions of dollars that the government now spends on police, courts, and corrections to wage war on drugs and would produce significant tax revenues. The policemen will have more time to focus on speeding violations, burglaries, and other offenses that law enforcement now lacks the opportunity to enforce

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