请帮我看看和修改语法我写的小文章 和删减不必要的句子 >< 非常紧急请帮我看看和修改语法我写的小文章 >< 非常紧急以下是我写的essay 第一段是introduction第二段是 body paragraph #1 请帮我看看

请帮我看看和修改语法我写的小文章 和删减不必要的句子 >< 非常紧急请帮我看看和修改语法我写的小文章 >< 非常紧急以下是我写的essay 第一段是introduction第二段是 body paragraph #1 请帮我看看
请帮我看看和修改语法我写的小文章 和删减不必要的句子 >< 非常紧急
请帮我看看和修改语法我写的小文章 >< 非常紧急
以下是我写的essay 第一段是introduction
第二段是 body paragraph #1
请帮我看看有没有符合写一篇 essay 的规格 thesis statement,topic sentence什麼的
请帮我修改语法 句子不通顺的地方 若有不需要的句子 也请帮我删减
Themain idea expressed by the story ‘’ watching and waiting’’ is a husband’srealization that jealousy and instruct are the harsh realities of life Why peopleget jealous so easily?And why jealousy is so powerful?We must think therequestions seriously,and figure out what jealousy problem in relationships.In orderto build trust in a relationship,there are several issues we need to considercarefully what we need to learn,especially for a couple or lover.
Jealousyis a sign of love,I believe everyone agree with that,because you really careof your other side,you care of his/her attitude,you care of his/hereverything,and you don’t want share your other sides with other people,youjust want him belong to you,when yousee your other side making some close action with a guy or girl,you may feel jealousy,that’s very normal,that’s kind of action showing that you love your otherside.In this story,the lawyer is very easily get jealousy ,I think theeither one reason is because he love his wife so much,and he feel so unsafebecause of his young beautiful wife.For some example ,this lawyer feel soanxious and jealous when he saw his wife dancing with a young man os her age’’this is a normal emotion especially for a a man.another example is he bring his wife movedfrom city to a rural area’’ because he feel that will make him feel more safeand will have more time to get together with his wife without others.

请帮我看看和修改语法我写的小文章 和删减不必要的句子 >< 非常紧急请帮我看看和修改语法我写的小文章 >< 非常紧急以下是我写的essay 第一段是introduction第二段是 body paragraph #1 请帮我看看
The main theme of the story “Watching and Waiting” is a husband’s realization that Jealousy and (instruction,不知您指什么?) are the harsh realities of life.Why people become jealous so easily?Why jealousy is so powerful?We must look at these questions seriously and figure out the problems of jealousy in a relationship.In order to build trust in a relationship,there are several issues we need to consider carefully and what are the things we need to learn,especially for couples or lovers.
I believe everyone agrees that jealousy is a sign of love,because you really care about your counterpart; you care about his/her attitude,in fact,you concern yourself with everything about him/her,and you won’t want to share him/her with others but to have him/her all by yourself.When you see your loved one showing excessive intimacy with a guy or a girl,you tend to feel jealous and that’svery normal for it shows that you love him/her.In this story,the lawyer gets jealous very easily; I think this is because he loves his beautiful young wife very much or he feels so unsafe due to the attractiveness of his wife.For examples,he feels anxious and jealous when his wife is dancing with a young man of her age; he moves their house from the city to a rural area so that his wife will meet less people and they can have more time together which makes him feel more relaxed.

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The main idea expressed by the story ‘’ watching and waiting’’ is a husband’s realization that jealousy and orders are the harsh realities of life . Why people get jealous so easily? why jea...

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The main idea expressed by the story ‘’ watching and waiting’’ is a husband’s realization that jealousy and orders are the harsh realities of life . Why people get jealous so easily? why jealousy is so powerful? We must take these questions seriously, and figure out what jealousy problems affect relationships. In order to build trust between people , there are several issues we need to consider carefully what we need to learn, especially for a couple or lover.
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Jealousy is a sign of love, I believe everyone holds the same view of that , because you really care for your another half , you care for his/her attitude, you care for everything, and you don’t want to expose the weakness of your beloved one to others, you just want him to belong to you, when you see your beloved one making some close actions with a guy or girl, you may feel jealous,that’s very normal, that’s kind of action shows that you love your other part . In this story, the lawyer is very easily to get into jealousy , I think the other reason is that he love his wife so much, andthe beauty of his wife makes his lack self confidence. For example ,this lawyer feel so anxious and jealous when he saw his wife dancing with a young man of her age,’this is a normal emotion especially for a man. Another example is that he takes his wife to live in a rural area’’ because he feels that will make him feel more safe and will have more time to get together with his wife without others disturbance.
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问句应该这么写吧，语序不对why do people get jealous so easily？
还有think about these questions seriously
what jealousy problem in relationships is.少is不成话，不过这句表达也别扭
we should to consider应该比need好点，还有最后那句有问...

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问句应该这么写吧，语序不对why do people get jealous so easily？
还有think about these questions seriously
what jealousy problem in relationships is.少is不成话，不过这句表达也别扭
we should to consider应该比need好点，还有最后那句有问题看不明白要表达的意思

我就看了一段，这个是学年论文吧，如果是的话，就不用这么费劲了，老师就只看看大概，主要是看格式对不对，有几个中心句能知道你写的是什么，没跑题就行了。

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