改正语法错误(英语读后感)文章如下飞屋环游记Flying Pixar movie is a story about a little boy Carle met a girl Elle when their in a small time and he has the same hobby.Because they have the same hobbies and walking together.One day,

改正语法错误(英语读后感)文章如下飞屋环游记Flying Pixar movie is a story about a little boy Carle met a girl Elle when their in a small time and he has the same hobby.Because they have the same hobbies and walking together.One day,
改正语法错误(英语读后感)文章如下
飞屋环游记
Flying Pixar movie is a story about a little boy Carle met a girl Elle when their in a small time and he has the same hobby.
Because they have the same hobbies and walking together.One day,Ellie whim,want to build a house on the edge of ParadiseFalls.I hope it is not implemented,Allie died.
With the urban development,Carle and Ellie together to build the house.Carle was forced to pull down under the heavy pressure,decided to fulfill his and Ellie dream together.
But in this way,Carle met the little boy Russell.The legendary bird Kevin,and a lovely "dog".
In order to realize this dream,they have overcome many difficulties,will be Charles and Kevin saved back,a childhood dream,spirit of adventure back to the city.
The hut also finally landed inParadiseFalls.

改正语法错误(英语读后感)文章如下飞屋环游记Flying Pixar movie is a story about a little boy Carle met a girl Elle when their in a small time and he has the same hobby.Because they have the same hobbies and walking together.One day,
Up tells a story about advanture.
It all started from the friendship between two kids,Carle and Ellie.
The little girl,Ellie,had the same hobby as Carle so they always played together and as day went by,they marred.One day,Ellie,Carle's wife,wanted to build a house on the top of ParadiseFalls.
后面那句我改不下去了,因为我看不懂.
我的感想
我前面改了很多.看得出来,您是直接写了中文然后用翻译器换成了英语,但是很遗憾的是,英语写作和中文的造词遣句的习惯是不同的.
如果只改语法,我很快就可以改完,所以刚开始我还想帮您撸一撸这文章.但是,您这篇文章实在不通.改了语法也不通,因为还有用词错误以及逻辑错误.
建议
先把你的中文版感想的逻辑撸顺了
然后再写英文版,您认真再写一次,再发出来,我们回答者也跟你看一次,尽自己所能给您提建议,你觉得怎样?

This article is really badly written. There is no cohesion and sentenes are 'broken'!!!
okay, let me try to correct.....
Flying Pixar is a movie about a little boy Carle who met a girl Elle wh...

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This article is really badly written. There is no cohesion and sentenes are 'broken'!!!
okay, let me try to correct.....
Flying Pixar is a movie about a little boy Carle who met a girl Elle when they were young. They both had the same hobbies.
Because they had the same hobbies, so one day while they were walking together, Ellie whimmed. She wanted to build a house on the edge of Paradise Falls. Before the house was built, Ellie died.
With the transformation of urban development, Carle and Ellie had dreamed together to build the house. As Ellie had died, Carle was forced under heavy pressure to build the house alone so as to fulfill his and Ellie dream together.
While buiding the house, Carle met the little boy Russell. The legendary bird Kevin, and a lovely "dog".
In order to help Carle realize this dream, they have overcome many difficulties. Kevin helped Carle saved back a childhood dream. Their spirit of adventure was made known to everybody in the city.
The hut instead of a house also finally landed in ParadiseFalls.

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