这里有一篇我自己写的初中英语作文,一些语法错误指出来,还可以加些优美语句,StudyI don't like studying and I think nobody likes studying in school.But if I don't study,I won't have a good mark.I must study very hard,altho

这里有一篇我自己写的初中英语作文,一些语法错误指出来,还可以加些优美语句,StudyI don't like studying and I think nobody likes studying in school.But if I don't study,I won't have a good mark.I must study very hard,altho
这里有一篇我自己写的初中英语作文,一些语法错误指出来,还可以加些优美语句,
Study
I don't like studying and I think nobody likes studying in school.But if I don't study,I won't have a good mark.I must study very hard,although I don't like it.
Sometimes I want to play,I don't study hard.My parents always say to me,"Don't watch TV and don't go online!You must study!" I thanks them,they help me more.They love me,I know.
I always talk with myself.I said to myself,"you must do ." But I always don't do for many days,even many months.Maybe it's about why I don't have a good mark.

这里有一篇我自己写的初中英语作文,一些语法错误指出来,还可以加些优美语句,StudyI don't like studying and I think nobody likes studying in school.But if I don't study,I won't have a good mark.I must study very hard,altho
I don't like studying and I think nobody likes studying at school.( at school比in school更常见,因为school不是一个大地点,所以用at.如果是一个大地点,例如一个城市,我们说in)
However,if I don't study,I won't have a good mark.(写作时,however比but更为正式.But更偏向口语）
I must study very hard,although I don't like it.
Sometimes I want to have some fun,so I don't study hard.（中文说“有时我想玩”,但是英文却不是用Play来解释的,英语里说have fun.如果说i want to have fun,就是我想要找点乐趣,也就近乎与“玩”了）
My parents are a bit worried about me,and they always urge me,"Don't watch TV and don't go online!You must study!" (这里你也可以说they always say to me,不过我觉得Urge是“劝”,可能更有那种你想表达的意思）
I appreciate that they help me so much（thank是一个动词(有时也做名词）,所以应该是i thank...he thanks,不过即使你用了i thank them,这种表达也是几乎没人说的.有一种可以是,i thank them for helping me so much.但是我觉得thank them,听起来多多少少别扭.所以你可以用一个更高级的词,appreciate,感激.还有一个问题就是,they help me more.如果前面你有提到他们帮主你什么,你可以说more,这里只要说很多就可以了.)
They love me,I know.
I always talk to myself,(跟谁说话的时候,可以说talk to someone,talk with someone,但是talk with someone是和一个人说话,当你想表达“对自己说”的时候=talk to myself) and promise myself that i must do well.(不要前面用现代时,后面用过去时.前面说talk to myself,又说say to myself太过重复.所以换成Promise）
But I can't stick to my promise for many days or even months.
Maybe this is why I don't usually get a good mark.
（it's about why...如果你换成this is why...强调性会更强）
(写好作文的一个因素就是,一个词不要一直重复着用.你可以换换别的词.你这里用了很多的always,其实代替always的,还有often,usually,frequently等等.你可以换一换.一种意思用很多方法说,才可以避免重复）

你可以投给英语辅导报的编辑部，他们有专业的老师来批改。O(∩_∩)O

I thanks them? 还有"you must do ......" But I always don't do for many days这个里面的两个do是不是给个明确的动词会好点，确实好像很不优美，这点我帮不上忙

I don't enjoy studying and I don't think others in my school do. But if I don't work hard enough, I won't be able to chieve a good mark. Therefore I have to convence myself that I must study very ha...

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I don't enjoy studying and I don't think others in my school do. But if I don't work hard enough, I won't be able to chieve a good mark. Therefore I have to convence myself that I must study very hard, although I don't enjoy it very much at the moment.
In many cases I just enjoy too much playing game and I don't have enough time to do my course work. My parents have kept warning me and saying, "Don't watch TV and don't go online! You have to do your school work!" I can understand their feeling and I have gratitude to them as they have helped so much in my life. They love me so much that they would like to help me in whatever way, which I appreciate a lot.
I always talk to myself "you must do ......", however I can forget what I have said quickly. Without firm determination is perhaps the reason that I cannot get good results.

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I thanks them who help me more. 句式太简单，没得改