英语高手来看看我这段话有没有语法错误~Actually,at first,I like him.At that time I thougt he is so much different from the other presidents of America.I believed he would make the change and take the change to America,even to all over

英语高手来看看我这段话有没有语法错误~Actually,at first,I like him.At that time I thougt he is so much different from the other presidents of America.I believed he would make the change and take the change to America,even to all over
英语高手来看看我这段话有没有语法错误~
Actually,at first,I like him.At that time I thougt he is so much different from the other presidents of America.I believed he would make the change and take the change to America,even to all over the world.But now,I think people are disappointed by him at some degree.People haven’t seen that difference he said in his speech.
But what I learnt from abama is daring to challenge and trusting myself.

英语高手来看看我这段话有没有语法错误~Actually,at first,I like him.At that time I thougt he is so much different from the other presidents of America.I believed he would make the change and take the change to America,even to all over
Actually,at first,I like him.At that time I thougt he （was） so much different from the other presidents of America.I believed he would make the change and take the change to America,even to the whole worle,（all over the world 是个副词短语）.But now,I think people are disappointed （at） him at some degree.People haven’t seen that difference he said in his speech.
But what I learnt from abama is daring to challenge and (trust) (one himself).

可以用一塌糊涂来形容哦~你是初中生吧？
开头的Actually完全没有必要。参考下我重写的吧。
Once I thought Obama was so much different from other presidents of America.I believed he would bring some changes to America,even to the world....

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可以用一塌糊涂来形容哦~你是初中生吧？
开头的Actually完全没有必要。参考下我重写的吧。
Once I thought Obama was so much different from other presidents of America.I believed he would bring some changes to America,even to the world.While today,people are disappointed because of his bad behavior on some cases.They haven`t seen the difference he has purposed in his speech.However,I like him.What I`ve learnt from him is how to deal with challenge and that we should trust ourselves no matter what we meet.
基本上依托原文,只是改了一些我觉得不合理的地方,仅供参考.

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