帮忙批改一篇英语作文,在此谢过啦 ⅣDear Manager,I'm a manager of a office facility import and export company,my name is Wang Gang.I learn about your company's intraduce from 《Urban Commerce》,I want to know if your company have prod

帮忙批改一篇英语作文,在此谢过啦 ⅣDear Manager,I'm a manager of a office facility import and export company,my name is Wang Gang.I learn about your company's intraduce from 《Urban Commerce》,I want to know if your company have prod
帮忙批改一篇英语作文,在此谢过啦 Ⅳ
Dear Manager,
I'm a manager of a office facility import and export company,my name is Wang Gang.I learn about your company's intraduce from 《Urban Commerce》,I want to know if your company have products that I need.Wheather have producted goods.Our company need a lot number of products and want to build businise communication with your company.
Of course.I will intraduce my company to you,so that you can learn our company will.Our company work as import and exprot businise .There are other six companies in China.Communicate with many companies at home.Ok.That's all!I hope get replain as soon as possiple.
yours sincerely
Wang Gang

帮忙批改一篇英语作文,在此谢过啦 ⅣDear Manager,I'm a manager of a office facility import and export company,my name is Wang Gang.I learn about your company's intraduce from 《Urban Commerce》,I want to know if your company have prod
1.introduce,不是 intraduce
2.英文中没有书名号《》,应改为引号.
3.I want to know 前面应加上 and
4.if your company has,不是 have
5.Wheather have producted goods.一句不通.
6.Our company needs,不是need,后面 wants
7.business,不是businise
8.Of course.不应是一句话.
9.learn our company will,最后的 应改为 more
10.Our company works,不是 work
11.Communicate with many companies at home.这句不通.
12.replain 应为 your reply
13.possiple 应为 possible
建议以后写完之后再好好检查一下.你的英文基础不错,单数第三人称动词加s你肯定知道,就是不够细心.
仅供参考.

首先Dear Sir/Mam/Mr.XXX(surname)
开头不应该说I am Manager, my name is ...
后面可以说Since the your company introduction has been issued on "XXX", I would like to know if the productXXX is available.
最后...

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首先Dear Sir/Mam/Mr.XXX(surname)
开头不应该说I am Manager, my name is ...
后面可以说Since the your company introduction has been issued on "XXX", I would like to know if the productXXX is available.
最后更不该说ok，这个太口语了
结尾可以说I look foward to your repying
署名的时候可以加XXX Manager

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