帮忙检查一下这段英文有没有语法错误和单词拼写错误（英文）!•Hello everybody.Today I want to tellyou how to walk from school to the New City .First,turn left when you leave school .Then you will see the •Qing he G

帮忙检查一下这段英文有没有语法错误和单词拼写错误（英文）!•Hello everybody.Today I want to tellyou how to walk from school to the New City .First,turn left when you leave school .Then you will see the •Qing he G
帮忙检查一下这段英文有没有语法错误和单词拼写错误（英文）!
•Hello everybody.Today I want to tellyou how to walk from school to the New City .First,turn left when you leave school .Then you will see the •Qing he Garden,across the street,you'll see Suning Supermarket.You can buy many things there.•At the second crossing you will see the Changyang Garden.Please turn right,in the end of Qingliangmen Street,you will see a few tall buildings.This is Chenlong Garden.Now you can see New City from a distance.There is a broad road in front of your eyes,through it.There are many small shops and a post office on the side of the road.Walk about a mile down the road,you will see New Cicy Plaza.
•New City Plaza has four floors.On the fourth floor,we can watch movies and play games.The cokes and popcorn there is very delicious.Many restaurants and clothing stores on the first floor,such as McDonald‘s and KFC,but the chicken is not healthy.On the third floor there is a lot of foods from different area,I like the Korean barbecue best.If you feel hunger ,you can try some korean food without korean kimchi .•Thank you for your listening.when you have free time ,you can go to New Cicy Plaze.

帮忙检查一下这段英文有没有语法错误和单词拼写错误（英文）!•Hello everybody.Today I want to tellyou how to walk from school to the New City .First,turn left when you leave school .Then you will see the •Qing he G
第四行in the end 用 at the end
第六行it 没有指代对象,还是它跟there之间是连接的?如连接,用逗号
第六行on the side of 建议用on both sides of
第二段第二行缺谓语动词,Many restaurants and clothing stores are on the first floor,或locate on the
第二段第四行该成hungry

•Hello everybody. Today I want to tellyou how to walk from school to the New City . First,turn left when you leave school . Then you will see the •Qing he Garden, across the street, you'll...

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•Hello everybody. Today I want to tellyou how to walk from school to the New City . First,turn left when you leave school . Then you will see the •Qing he Garden, across the street, you'll see Suning Supermarket. You can buy many things there.•At the second crossing you will see the Changyang Garden.Please turn right, in the end of QingLiangMen Street,you will see a few tall buildings.This is Chenlong Garden. Now you can see New City from a distance. There is a broad road in front of your eyes, through it.There are many small shops and a post office on the side of the road. Walk about a mile down the road, you will see New Cicy Plaza. •New City Plaza has four floors.On the fourth floor, we can watch movies and play games. The cokes and popcorn there is very delicious. Many restaurants and clothing stores on the first floor, such as McDonald‘s and KFC, but the chicken is not healthy. On the third floor there is a lot of foods from different area, I like the Korean barbecue best.If you feel hunger ，you can try some korean food without korean kimchi .•Thank you listen to my introduction .If you have free time ,you can go to New Cicy Plaze.

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