英语日记请帮修改下,Today is october 1,the National day.The sun is shining and the weather is warm In the morning,what a wonderful day it will be!The country will be performing a ceremony to celebrate the 58th anniversary of foundation of the

英语日记请帮修改下,Today is october 1,the National day.The sun is shining and the weather is warm In the morning,what a wonderful day it will be!The country will be performing a ceremony to celebrate the 58th anniversary of foundation of the
英语日记请帮修改下,
Today is october 1,the National day.The sun is shining and the weather is warm In the morning,what a wonderful day it will be!The country will be performing a ceremony to celebrate the 58th anniversary of foundation of the People's Republic of China in BeiJing.This week is called 'gold week',during this time,most of the people who are busying with their work or study,such as the workers,the servants and the students have a seven day's vacation .Many people are going on a traveling trip but I am spending my vacation in home for some reason.It is a little pity that I can't get my dreams of going to BeiJing to celebrate the National day come true.

英语日记请帮修改下,Today is october 1,the National day.The sun is shining and the weather is warm In the morning,what a wonderful day it will be!The country will be performing a ceremony to celebrate the 58th anniversary of foundation of the
October 1st,首字母大写,1后加st.
最好是hold 不用 be performing,
Beijing,j 小写
golden week 好一些.
during this period好一些,你想表达的是这段时间,一段时间是period
be busy with,不要加ing.
seven-day holiday,或seven days' holiday
have a seven days' holiday 最好用将来时,will
trip 即可,travelling 就重复了
spending 没有现在分词表将来的含义,最好改为be going to spend
in home 改为 at home
get my dream come true 要是改为realise my dream 就更通顺了
所以改完后的全文是
Today is October 1st,the National Day.The sun is shining and the day is warm in the morning.What a wonderful day it will be!The country will hold a ceremony to celebrate the 58th anniversary of foundation of the People's Republic of China in Beijing.This week is called golden week,during this period,most of people who are busy with their work or study,such as workers,servants or students will have a seven-day holiday.Many people will go on a trip,but I am going to spend my vacation at home for some reason.It is a little pity that I cannot realise my dream of celebrating the National Day in Beijing.

Today is 1st October, the National Day. It was warm and the sun was shining in the morning. What a lovely day it would be! A celebration ceremony for the 58th anniversary of China is going to be held ...

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Today is 1st October, the National Day. It was warm and the sun was shining in the morning. What a lovely day it would be! A celebration ceremony for the 58th anniversary of China is going to be held in Beijing. The following week is called'golden week', which is ideal for people busy with their works or studies, such as workers and students, to have a relaxation and enjoy themselves. Although a lot of people are going travelling during the holiday, I have to stay at home for some reasons. It is really a pity that I cannot realise my dream of celebrating the National Day in Beijing.
一些意思不通的地方把句子改了（根原文略有不同）

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