请帮忙修正我英语日记中的错误 ,非常感谢Dear ：For improving a writing skill , i will to write a composition in every week.If you feel free.Please help me to check the Composition .Thanks for your help .Best Regards.Nov 23.2006 thu

请帮忙修正我英语日记中的错误 ,非常感谢Dear ：For improving a writing skill , i will to write a composition in every week.If you feel free.Please help me to check the Composition .Thanks for your help .Best Regards.Nov 23.2006 thu
请帮忙修正我英语日记中的错误 ,非常感谢
Dear ：
For improving a writing skill , i will to write a composition in every week.
If you feel free.Please help me to check the Composition .
Thanks for your help .
Best Regards.
Nov 23.2006 thursday light rain
Yesterday evering I have supper in a restauant which i often stayed in .The boss is from GuiZhou Province .he is a young man with a excellent aspect . when i came in his sight ,he smiled and asked me :"What do you want ? the beef is very fresh. I just choosed it in food market ". i said : "OK" . wait for a moment . he have cooked it and take it to my table and said: please enjoying .if you have any questions. please let me know .i will improved it . i said :" thank you .but it delicious".
this evering . i came in this restauant for supper again . he asked me ："the beef is really delicious? but your face is give away your heart .it's badly ,isn't it ? hehe". i smiled. he sayid:"yes,in fact ,your cooking skills is still need study. hehe", he said :yesterday I cooking food with a sorrow mood . when i have a good mood,my cooking is able to get better ".then i asked he a question ："Perhaps I go to your restaurant to have a meal ex- first essentials to ask whether you have a good mood or not ". his face was flushing and give me a unnatral smile. afterwards, he said :No, if you enjoy here . i will cooking more delicious foods&my mood will get better. ：)

请帮忙修正我英语日记中的错误 ,非常感谢Dear ：For improving a writing skill , i will to write a composition in every week.If you feel free.Please help me to check the Composition .Thanks for your help .Best Regards.Nov 23.2006 thu
Yesterday evering I have supper in a restauant which i often stayed in .The boss is from GuiZhou Province .he is a young man with an excellent character.Everytime when he saw me,he will smile and asked," May I help you?The beef just came in from the market,it's very fresh.Would you like some?" I replied," Sure." After a while,he finished cooking the beef and serve it personally to me."Please approach me for feedbacks.I will be glad to improve on my cooking." I smiled back and said with beef in my mouth," It's perfect!" This evening,I came into this restaurant for dinner again.He asked ," Does the beef really taste good?Your face don't match with your mouth.It taste terrible,right?" I smiled," Actually your cooking skills still need some improvements." He said," Yesterday,I felt sorrow while I cooked.But most of the time,when I am happy,my food will taste better.So I replied," So when I went into your restaurant to have a meal,I must asked whether are you having a good mood or bad mood?" His face blushed and smile sheepishly.After a while,he said," Of course not,if you like to eat here,I will definitely cook more delicious food and my mood will be better."
死小鬼...我看你这样的英文你考试会死得多掺

改:Dear(加名词) ：
For improving a(去掉a,改为my) writing skill , i(大写I) will to (去掉to)write a composition in(去掉in ) every week.
If you feel(feel 改为are) free,please help me to check it.(指代作文)Thanks fo...

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改:Dear(加名词) ：
For improving a(去掉a,改为my) writing skill , i(大写I) will to (去掉to)write a composition in(去掉in ) every week.
If you feel(feel 改为are) free,please help me to check it.(指代作文)Thanks for your help .
Best Regards.
Nov 23.2006 thursday light rain(drizzle 表示小雨)
Yesterday evering I have supper in a restauant which i often stayed in .The boss is (加came )from GuiZhou Province .
he is a young man with a excellent aspect .(改为:he is a young man who is very handsome. )
when i came in his sight ,he smiled and asked me :"What do you want ? the beef is very fresh. I just choosed it in food market ".
改为:when i went into his restanant, he asked me with a sweet smile:"what do you order? today the beef is very fresh. i have bought it in the market."
i said : "OK" . for a short time . he have cooked it and take it to my table, then said:" enjoying,please." if you have any good advices for this dish,please let me know.i will improving it . i said :" thank you .and it is good and very delicious."
Today,i came into this restauant for supper again (supper 就是晚饭,不用说晚上了). he asked me ："is the beef really delicious? your face is give away your heart .it's not very good,isn't it ?. "
i answered with a smile,"yes,in fact ,your cooking skills is still need improving. ", he said :yesterday I have a sorow when i cooked. but,for the most time,when i have a good mood,my cooking is getting better ".then i relply him ："maybe I went into your restaurant to have a meal ,which is in order to ask whether you have a good mood or not ". his face was flushing and give me a unnatral smile. afterwards, he said :"No, if you like there, i will cook more delicious foods, and my mood will get better....... ：)
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