求改作文（英文）主要改下语法,时态之类的：As the vividly drawing is shown ,a young man has a name of beckham on his face,and another man has a hair style which is the same as beckham.this thought-provoking picture illustrates that

求改作文（英文）主要改下语法,时态之类的：As the vividly drawing is shown ,a young man has a name of beckham on his face,and another man has a hair style which is the same as beckham.this thought-provoking picture illustrates that
求改作文（英文）
主要改下语法,时态之类的：
As the vividly drawing is shown ,a young man has a name of beckham on his face,and another man has a hair style which is the same as beckham.this thought-provoking picture illustrates that superstar has a huge influence on the youngs.
The influence from superstar can have a good effect on the youngs,if the superstar's social activity is positive and helpful to the youngs,and the youngs will accept it more easily,because they love their star,and follow them.so the superstar should take the duty to lead the youngs to bright future.on the contrary,if the superstar can not show their social duty,or even break it,which will have a bad effect on the society ,especially to youngs.
Above all,superstar's behaviour is not just related to himself,but also have a directly effect on youngs,so they should have more social responsibilities to lead the youngs,and together we can make our society more harmonious.

求改作文（英文）主要改下语法,时态之类的：As the vividly drawing is shown ,a young man has a name of beckham on his face,and another man has a hair style which is the same as beckham.this thought-provoking picture illustrates that
As the vividly drawing showes ,a young man has the name of Beckham on his face,and another man has the same hair style with Beckham.This thought-provoking picture illustrates that super star has a huge influence on the youngs.
The influence of super star can affect the youngs in a good way if their social activity is positive and helpful,in addition,the youngs can accept it more easily,because they love their idol,and follow their activities.Thus,the superstar should take the responsbility to lead the youngs to bright future.
On the contrary,if the superstar can not obey their social duty,or even break it,then they will have bad effects on the society ,especially to the youngs.
Above all,superstar's behaviour is not just have effects on himself,but also have directly effects on the youngs,so they should take more social responsibilities to the youngs,and together we can make our society more harmonious.
注意每句开头大写,有一些用法不对,自己对一下我改了哪里吧.
好好学习天天向上.哈哈

由于绘图生动地显示，一名年轻男子有贝克汉姆的名字在他的脸上，和另一名男子有一个发型，这是因为令人深思的图片beckham.this同样表明，超级巨星已经对扬巨大的影响。
巨星的影响可以从对扬了良好的效果，如果巨星的社会活动是积极的，有助于扬，而扬将接受更容易，因为他们热爱自己的明星，并按照them.so超级巨星应采取责任带领到光明future.on扬相反，如果不能证明自己的巨星社会责...

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由于绘图生动地显示，一名年轻男子有贝克汉姆的名字在他的脸上，和另一名男子有一个发型，这是因为令人深思的图片beckham.this同样表明，超级巨星已经对扬巨大的影响。
巨星的影响可以从对扬了良好的效果，如果巨星的社会活动是积极的，有助于扬，而扬将接受更容易，因为他们热爱自己的明星，并按照them.so超级巨星应采取责任带领到光明future.on扬相反，如果不能证明自己的巨星社会责任，甚至打破它，这将有一个对社会不良影响，特别是扬。
总之，巨星的行为不只是涉及自己，但也有直接影响扬，所以他们应该有更多的社会责任，带领扬，和我们一起可以使我们的社会更加和谐。

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As shown in the various pictures, a young man has Beckham's name on his face and another man has the same hair style as that of Beckham's. This thought-provoking picture illustrates that superstars ha...

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As shown in the various pictures, a young man has Beckham's name on his face and another man has the same hair style as that of Beckham's. This thought-provoking picture illustrates that superstars have huge influences on the youngsters.
The influence of superstars can have a good effect on the teenager if their social images are positive and their lives are decent. Teenagers will accept these principles more easily because they love their stars and they are willing to follow them. So superstars are responsible for leading the youngsters to a bright future. On the contrary, if superstars fail to do their duty, or even go against their duty, it will cause bad effects to the society, especially to the youngsters.
Above all, superstars' behaviours are not just their own business. Their behavious also cast direct effects on the youngsters, so they should take more social responsibilities to be good models of the youngsters and thus together, we can make our society more harmonious.

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As the vividly drawing showes ,a young man has the name of Beckham on his face,and another man has the same hair style with Beckham. This thought-provoking picture illustrates that super star has a hu...

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As the vividly drawing showes ,a young man has the name of Beckham on his face,and another man has the same hair style with Beckham. This thought-provoking picture illustrates that super star has a huge influence on the youngs.
The influence of super star can affect the youngs in a good way if their social activity is positive and helpful, in addition, the youngs can accept it more easily,because they love their idol,and follow their activities. Thus, the superstar should take the responsbility to lead the youngs to bright future.
On the contrary,if the superstar can not obey their social duty,or even break it, then they will have bad effects on the society ,especially to the youngs.
Above all,superstar's behaviour is not just have effects on himself,but also have directly effects on the youngs, so they should take more social responsibilities to the youngs,and together we can make our society more harmonious.

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