请大家帮我修改一下这边英文小作文,关于刘翔受伤.These days some boring netizens doubtthat Liu Xiang deliberately fell in the race just because theannouncer had made prediction before Liu Xiang's match.I totally can't agree with th

请大家帮我修改一下这边英文小作文,关于刘翔受伤.These days some boring netizens doubtthat Liu Xiang deliberately fell in the race just because theannouncer had made prediction before Liu Xiang's match.I totally can't agree with th
请大家帮我修改一下这边英文小作文,关于刘翔受伤.
These days some boring netizens doubt
that Liu Xiang deliberately fell in the race just because the
announcer had made prediction before Liu Xiang's match.
I totally can't agree with them.I think it’s
common that the announcer will make a variety of prediction for the outcome of
the match and this is not only for Liu Xiang's completion this time.Liu
Xiang's coach placed the message of foot injury on the public,not isolating it
from everyone but merely telling that to the announcer.
Moreover,why can't the announcer be moved
by the behavior that Liu Xiang ran to the end point with one leg even though the
announcer had mode the prediction?Why can't the announcer have true feeling
towards him?This idea what is he cry just because he had already plan to cry
is also very sloppy.
At least,Liu Xiang didn't quit the match
with the acquaintance of his foot injury which was just like 2008.And Liu has
won lots of world championships in addition to Olympic gold medal.All these
can prove that he is an excellent athlete,who deserves to be respected.So I
don't think Liu deliberately fell in the race.And I call this kind of
people conspiracy theorists,who’d like to turn easy matters into complicated
ones.

请大家帮我修改一下这边英文小作文,关于刘翔受伤.These days some boring netizens doubtthat Liu Xiang deliberately fell in the race just because theannouncer had made prediction before Liu Xiang's match.I totally can't agree with th
第一行,doubtED.
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看了几行不再细看,你基本上没有大的语法错误,这方面很不错滴；但是就这篇文章本身来说,论证结构有点点单一,指代虽然正确但是用法还可以酌量减少.过多的指代会混乱主题哟~（其中刘翔教练的那句,到底你想是it 还是that,明明就是同一个~这个在SAT语法里面我就直接算是错的了）词汇方面非常庞大（你是不是背了红宝之后写的?）,不过写作很多时候不是拼词汇量,而是尽量精确的用法.这篇文章仔细看之后请修改下是全篇时态一致（刚扫到最后一点And Liu has won ...gold medal.在前不接村后不着店的情况下,用过去式就可以了,撑死了加一个already表示已经）.
第一行出现的boring,情感的方面固然蛮到位,但是无法避免情绪化之嫌,不够dispassionate,显得基调不够客观；另外,就每段来说,论点过小,感觉每段都在将一样的话重复.如果你不想大幅修改全文,可以在开头稍微讲一下这个事件的始末,使你的论据援引的各种细节有迹可循.