一篇英语演讲稿,请帮忙修改.Hello,everyoneMy topic today is the aim of Senior High School Entrance Examination.My aim is the Baoan high school.Because Baoan high school has a comfortable situation for me to study.and it is also near my home

一篇英语演讲稿,请帮忙修改.Hello,everyoneMy topic today is the aim of Senior High School Entrance Examination.My aim is the Baoan high school.Because Baoan high school has a comfortable situation for me to study.and it is also near my home
一篇英语演讲稿,请帮忙修改.
Hello,everyone
My topic today is the aim of Senior High School Entrance Examination.My aim is the Baoan high school.
Because Baoan high school has a comfortable situation for me to study.and it is also near my home.
But the main reason is the teachers in Baoan high school are always stricting with students.
Baoan high school is not only my aim,but also my parents' hope.
For these reasons,i will do my best to finish my aim.I believe nothing in the world is difficult for one who sets his mind on it.
That's all.thank you for listening.
检查一下有没有语法错,单词拼写错误或者有什么新的提议把某个词换成更好的,但是我希望能够使全班大部分的同学都能听懂我在说什么.
谢谢了!

一篇英语演讲稿,请帮忙修改.Hello,everyoneMy topic today is the aim of Senior High School Entrance Examination.My aim is the Baoan high school.Because Baoan high school has a comfortable situation for me to study.and it is also near my home
你好我是初三的一位学生 我觉得你用的语法会不会太简单啦?还是你怕错误才用简单的语句的.我想你最好能用点从句 既然是演讲稿就要有点水平自己也有面子嘛我给你举个例子吧 我只是建议啊 毕竟我不是专业的
我觉得你开头有点太废话也有点死板 能缩点吗 以从句来增加文章的长度
today’s topic is the aim of Senior High School Entrance Examination .my ideal
school is the Baoan high school for it‘s comfortable situation and system.我就给你举这么个列子 你自己在看看 因为没个人的想发不一样 反正 你不要老用简单句嘛

第二行的My aim 改成it is about ... 第四行的because 去掉，后面的has 改成is ,situation 改成 place near my home." and it is also near my home.
"删掉。But the main reason is 后面加上that.第七行的aim 改成 ideal school.hope 删掉》finish my aim改成achievemy goal。 his mind on it的on 改成to

Hello，everyone.My topic is about （加上about）the aim of（Senior省去) High School Entrance Examination.My aim is （the省去） Baoan High School,(h,s均要大写)because it is a good place (to me省去)to study.and it is also...

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Hello，everyone.My topic is about （加上about）the aim of（Senior省去) High School Entrance Examination.My aim is （the省去） Baoan High School,(h,s均要大写)because it is a good place (to me省去)to study.and it is also near my home.But the main reason is the teachers in Baoan High School are always stricting with students.It(Baoan high school用it代替即可) is not only my aim,but also my parents' hope.
For these reasons,i will do my best to achieve(finish改为achieve) my aim.I believe nothing is difficult if you put your heat in it.(原句改为此句)
That's all.Thank you for listening.

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