求帮忙修改一篇高中英语自我介绍请帮忙修改修改.有语法错误或者语病的帮我指出来.希望多帮我改用一些从句,写的差还请谅解,修改很到位的另外加分Hello everyone.Happy Christmas Day.My name is xxx.I

求帮忙修改一篇高中英语自我介绍请帮忙修改修改.有语法错误或者语病的帮我指出来.希望多帮我改用一些从句,写的差还请谅解,修改很到位的另外加分Hello everyone.Happy Christmas Day.My name is xxx.I
求帮忙修改一篇高中英语自我介绍
请帮忙修改修改.有语法错误或者语病的帮我指出来.希望多帮我改用一些从句,写的差还请谅解,修改很到位的另外加分
Hello everyone.Happy Christmas Day.My name is xxx.I am sixteen years old.Igraduate from XXX Middle School.
In my spare time .I like to read some books.I think reading could enlarge my knowledge.I must study hard so that my ten-year hard work will pay off.I hope I can be admitted to the ideal university .I hope we can work together to progress together.We shouldn’t let down our parents.

求帮忙修改一篇高中英语自我介绍请帮忙修改修改.有语法错误或者语病的帮我指出来.希望多帮我改用一些从句,写的差还请谅解,修改很到位的另外加分Hello everyone.Happy Christmas Day.My name is xxx.I
一读就知道你的英语基础不太扎实,虽然没多少语法错误但是用词造句比较awkward.不过你年龄还小,有的是机会提高~
Hello everyone,happy Christmas Day!My name is xxx,a sixteen-year-old girl/boy,who has graduated from XXX Middle School.
Generally,I am a big fan of different types of books cause I believe reading builds up my knowledge.During the next couple of semesters,I am going to study hard and hopefully all the works will finally pay off and I will be admitted to my ideal university .I hope we can work together and progress together.You know,we are not supposed to let our parents down.
大概改动了下,这样是不是就好多了呢?平时要多加练习呀!=）

Hello everyone.Happy Christmas Day. My name is xxx. I am sixteen years old. I graduate from XXX Middle School.
In my spare time .I like reading books. I think reading can widen my knowledge . I...

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Hello everyone.Happy Christmas Day. My name is xxx. I am sixteen years old. I graduate from XXX Middle School.
In my spare time .I like reading books. I think reading can widen my knowledge . I must study hard so that my ten-year hard work will pay off. I hope I can be admitted to the ideal university . I hope we can work together to progress together.We shouldn’t let our parents down .
你可以尝试用些特殊句式，来增加文采，也会更流畅。

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Hello everyone.Merry Christmas Day. My name is xxx. I am sixteen years old. I graduated from XXX Middle School.
In my spare time .I like to read some books. I think reading could enlarge my knowle...

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Hello everyone.Merry Christmas Day. My name is xxx. I am sixteen years old. I graduated from XXX Middle School.
In my spare time .I like to read some books. I think reading could enlarge my knowledge. I must study hard so that my ten-year hard work will pay off. I hope I can be admitted to ideal university . I hope we can work together to make progress together.We shouldn’t let our parents.down

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Happy Christmas .day 有点多余 i am XXX who graduate from XXXmiddle school and sixteen .
I like reading in my spare time for its could enlarge my knowledge.
from now on ,I hope we can work hard together for improvement so that our parents won't feel down.