哪位大侠帮我看看这篇英语短文,看看有多少语法错误、用词不当和结构错误!In the today,according to the science and technology developing,human being are going to the new era.Many media were provided multifarious informatio

哪位大侠帮我看看这篇英语短文,看看有多少语法错误、用词不当和结构错误!In the today,according to the science and technology developing,human being are going to the new era.Many media were provided multifarious informatio
哪位大侠帮我看看这篇英语短文,看看有多少语法错误、用词不当和结构错误!
In the today,according to the science and technology developing,human being are going to the new era.Many media were provided multifarious information and knowledge to people,such as books,television and theatre.But these type of media have many advantages and disadvantages.
The book is one of prime mode of human being obtained knowledge,and the book is always a best friend of people.Compare book with other media,it can not substitute.But,it have more than disadvantage with others.For example,a book is made from many paper,and many paper consume many tree.From a number of recent studies,a tree is absorbing CO2 3000m³one year,and production O2 3000m³.We think about how much was made a book with tree’s consumption,and how much value of environment of these tree.
Let we see theatre,many countries have a various theatre,such as Beijing opera representative kinds of Chinese theatre.Bunraku is Japanese theatre,and
Italy theatre is one of represent of European’s culture.These theatre were provided that we know a best mode of nation and they were harvest of all people.But compare the book and television,it has many disadvantage,for instance,we must spend many time seat into threat that enjoy it.
From a number of Economist studies,the television is becoming mode of the most importance of people’s media.It bring more convenience since it was birth.It more than message with others,we watch TV when we lay bed and drink Coca-Cola.But television have many disadvantage,such as,it harm children eyes when he(or she) watch TV longtime and it have many unhealthy progress will harm children mentality.
All in all,a various media have many advantage and disadvantage,we must use of their advantage and against their disadvantage.In this way,they are good friend of human being.
注意我不是要翻译,
本人还会在给50分的。并且有可能长期寻求帮助。回复Sinosophy我要是有那水平就不用在这麻烦别人了，我就在这帮助别人了。再说正因为没有这水平才要多写多看呢。

哪位大侠帮我看看这篇英语短文,看看有多少语法错误、用词不当和结构错误!In the today,according to the science and technology developing,human being are going to the new era.Many media were provided multifarious informatio
给这么高的分,我来认真帮你改一下吧：）我打（）的地方是改动过的.
[]的地方是我没看懂的.
1.（Today）,（due) to the science and technology (development), human being are (entering into a) new era. Many media (are providing) multifarious information and knowledge to people, such as book, television and theatre. But these (） media have many advantages and disadvantages.
2.(Book) is one of （the) prime (modes for) human being (to obtain) knowledge, and (book has always been people's) best friend. (Comparing) book with other media, (it is clear that book can not be substituted). But, it (has some disadvantages compared) with others. For example, (books are made of) paper, and (paper consume a lot of trees). (According to) a number of recent studies, (one tree absorbs 3000m³CO2 a) year, and (produces) 3000m³ O2. We (need to think about how many trees were consumed to make a book and what is the value of these trees to our environment).
3.(Next, let's look at )theatre, many countries have (various types of) (theatres), such as Beijing opera representative kinds of Chinese theatre. Bunraku is Japanese theatre, and
Italy theatre is (a representation) of European’s culture. These (theatres) [were provided that we know a best mode of nation and they were harvest of all people](中括号里的英文我不太明白,所以没改）. But （compared with book and television), it has many (disadvantages), for instance, we must spend (long) time (sitting in the threatre to) enjoy it.
4.From a number of Economist studies, the television is becoming (the most important mode) of people’s media. It (brings) more convenience since (its) birth. [It more than message with others](这句也没明白是什么意思）, we (can) watch TV when we (laying in) bed and (drinking) Coca-Cola. But television (has) many (disadvantages also), such as, it (harms children's) eyes when (they) watch TV (for too long) and it (also has) many (other) unhealthy (aspects which) will harm (children's) mentality.
5.All in all, ()various media have (various advantages and disadvantages), we must (maximize their advantages) and (minimize) their (disadvantages). In this way, (all media will be) good (friends) of human being.
建议将第四段和第三段掉换位置,因为第三段提到了书和电视这两个媒体,而按照现在的顺序在讲第三段的时候还文章没涉及到电视,感觉有点突兀.还有问题你可以直接与我联系.希望能够帮到你：-）

我修改好的版本,语法应该不会有错，但是因时间短促而且要保持原文的基础上，未能改到我最满意的版本，如果你愿意大改的话，可以把用词和搭配改得更漂亮。
Today, with the development of science and technology, human beings are entering the new era. Many media are providing mult...

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我修改好的版本,语法应该不会有错，但是因时间短促而且要保持原文的基础上，未能改到我最满意的版本，如果你愿意大改的话，可以把用词和搭配改得更漂亮。
Today, with the development of science and technology, human beings are entering the new era. Many media are providing multifarious information and knowledge to people, such as books, television and theatres. But these types of media have many advantages and disadvantages.
The book is one of the prime modes of human beings when obtaining knowledge, and the book is always a best friend of people. Comparing the book with other media, it can not be substituted. However, it has more disadvantages than others. For example, a book is made from paper, and paper consume trees. From a number of recent studies, a tree is absorbing 3000m³ CO2 a year, and producting 3000m³ O2 . We should think about how many trees have been consumed to make books, while how much value of these trees to the environment.
Let's take a look at the theatre. Many countries have various theatres, such as Beijing Opera Theatre. Bunraku is a Japanese theatre, and Italy theatre is one of the representatives of European culture. These theatres provide a best mode of nation and they are wisdom crystal of people all over the world. But comparing it with the book and the television, it still has many disadvantages, for instance, we must spend a lot of time sitting into threatres to enjoy it.
According to a number of Economist studies, the television is becoming the most important media these days. It brings more convenience since it's birth. It delivers more messages than other media, and we can watch TV at any time, even laying in the bed and drinking Coca-Cola. But the television has many disadvantages too, for example, it harms children's eyes when he(or she) watches TV for a long time and many unhealthy programs shown on TV will harm children's mentality.
All in all, various media have many advantages and disadvantages, and we must make full use of their advantages while try our best to eliminate their disadvantages. In this way, they can be good friends to human beings.

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写英文是绝对不能用中文想的！
八个字：
读英想英记英写英。
到什么山唱什么歌。没到那个山，就唱不了那个歌。非要唱，大脑里面没有那个文，是出不来那个词的。就是这个道理。不是针对楼主，而是针对所有希望写好英文者的道理。楼主不必介意。
而且，即使他人修改了，仍然无法达到楼主心中的目标，对不对？
一个人的想法，只能是那个人的想法的。越俎代庖！不行的。
进步。...

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写英文是绝对不能用中文想的！
八个字：
读英想英记英写英。
到什么山唱什么歌。没到那个山，就唱不了那个歌。非要唱，大脑里面没有那个文，是出不来那个词的。就是这个道理。不是针对楼主，而是针对所有希望写好英文者的道理。楼主不必介意。
而且，即使他人修改了，仍然无法达到楼主心中的目标，对不对？
一个人的想法，只能是那个人的想法的。越俎代庖！不行的。
进步。

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2个翻译各有千秋，现在丁当张同志的版本上补充几点我的看法：
第一段media 的复数是medium/theater加复数s/enter不用加into
第二段consume加s
第三段representative of……/Bunraku is a Japanese theatre/spend a long time
第四段According to a number ...

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2个翻译各有千秋，现在丁当张同志的版本上补充几点我的看法：
第一段media 的复数是medium/theater加复数s/enter不用加into
第二段consume加s
第三段representative of……/Bunraku is a Japanese theatre/spend a long time
第四段According to a number of economists' studies/But television also(has) many (disadvantages). For example, it……
请注意单复数哦，最后一段和此版本不明处参照Angel的

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