帮忙看看这里面有没有语法错误,Insist on our aimsThe passage tells us a wild duck,who is called Wally,didn’t insist on the journey.The reason is that he saw a flock of ducks on the ground eating corn and he dived to the yard.Finally,he

帮忙看看这里面有没有语法错误,Insist on our aimsThe passage tells us a wild duck,who is called Wally,didn’t insist on the journey.The reason is that he saw a flock of ducks on the ground eating corn and he dived to the yard.Finally,he
帮忙看看这里面有没有语法错误,
Insist on our aims
The passage tells us a wild duck,who is called Wally,didn’t insist on the journey.The reason is that he saw a flock of ducks on the ground eating corn and he dived to the yard.Finally,he become a yard duck.
After reading the story,I am lost in deeply thoughts.There are many people similar with Wally.When they are try to do something,if he or she get into difficulties,they often chose give up their aims.So their results like Wally,they still a ordinary people even more badly.
If I am Wally,when the first attempt failed,I think I will try again.Untill I succseed.Because,only in this way,I can be successful
In my opinion,it is necessary for us persist in our aims.And then we likely become a successful man

帮忙看看这里面有没有语法错误,Insist on our aimsThe passage tells us a wild duck,who is called Wally,didn’t insist on the journey.The reason is that he saw a flock of ducks on the ground eating corn and he dived to the yard.Finally,he
1、he saw a flock of ducks on the ground eating corn 改为he saw a flock of ducks eating corn on the ground.地点状语需要后置
2、and he dived to the 改为 and he dived into the 分析：dive后不跟to,而是要跟into,潜入,所以有in的意思
3、I am lost in deeply thoughts其中的deeply改为deep ,deep为形容词,deeply 为副词,而同时deep也可以为副词,两个副词是有细微差别的,你可以再查一下.
4、When they are try to 其中的try改为trying.
5、When they are trying to do something,if he or she get into difficulties,一般情况下两个从句不能这样一起用,可以改为When they are trying to do something and getting into difficulties,they...
6、they often chose give up their aims 注意：chose是choose的过去式,由上句可以知道,应为现在时,而且choose应该后面加介词to.故为：they often choose to give up their aims
7、So their results like Wally,they still a ordinary people even more badly.改为So their results are just like Wally‘s, they are still an ordinary people even worse.改了好几处,你都注意以下.最后的even more badly说明特殊词的比较级形式你还没有记住.
8、If I am Wally and my first attempt fails,I think I will try and try again until I succeed .其中succeed还有until你都写错了.
9、Because,only in this way can I be successful 这个句子涉及到了倒装句.可以在把这个语法结构看一下.
10、it is necessary for us persist 这句话的us后面要加一个to,这个句式很重要,别漏掉介词.
11、And then we likely become a successful man 这句话说明likely这个词你没搞懂.自己看一下这个词的用法.改为：And then we are likely to become a successful man .