各位大神帮忙看看这篇雅思小作文能给多少分,The line chart below indicates the amount of four kinds of meat eaten by people in a European country between 1979 and 2004.As can be seen from the chart,in the year of 1979,the largest con

各位大神帮忙看看这篇雅思小作文能给多少分,The line chart below indicates the amount of four kinds of meat eaten by people in a European country between 1979 and 2004.As can be seen from the chart,in the year of 1979,the largest con
各位大神帮忙看看这篇雅思小作文能给多少分,
The line chart below indicates the amount of four kinds of meat eaten by people in a European country between 1979 and 2004.
As can be seen from the chart,in the year of 1979,the largest consumption of meat went to beef which accounted for 220g per person per week.The second was lamb with 150g followed by chicken with less than 150g.The smallest amount of consumption went to fish,only purchased more than 50g.After that the consumption of beef decreased greatly to 180g then recovered significantly to its top,reaching at almost 230g per person per week in 1980.Then after a dim and a climb the amount of beef dropped greatly from the peak to the bottom(100g) between 1980 and 2003.However the trend of chicken experienced a totally contrary situation.More precisely,after a little fluctuate,in nearly 1980,the amount of chicken shoot up in next 20 years,peaking at 250g ultimately.As regards lamb,it fallen dramatically to more than 100g in 1980.From this point onwards,the amount of lamb dropped gradually to more than 50g per person per week in 2004.Concerning fish,the amount remained stable at 50g over the whole time.
To conclude,chicken replaced beef and became the favorite meat in 2004.

各位大神帮忙看看这篇雅思小作文能给多少分,The line chart below indicates the amount of four kinds of meat eaten by people in a European country between 1979 and 2004.As can be seen from the chart,in the year of 1979,the largest con
最高5.5
没有太复杂的句子 没有比较,只是写出来数字,有的地方有一点点错误,可能是打字的时候出现的
想要提高一点要有比较

没有比较复杂的句子,文中反复使用了 amount 可用 scalar,quantity 交替使用...
大概5分 到5.5分的样子吧 我觉得.

感觉句子有点普通，词汇就像大学英语六级的差不多，不过基本没啥错误，差不多就5、6分吧

有条件花钱去51批改网上找老外改吧，我之前也一直为找不到合适的人帮忙改作文而烦恼，最后发现了批改网，再过两天我就要走上考场了，最近一直在模拟、在冲刺。也祝你考试顺利