英语好的童鞋能帮我看看这篇短文的语法吗?My friend mike is a Movie fan,he likes movies very much.We often go to movies on weekends.He likes all kinds of movies,but action movies are his favorite.He likes the famous actor Jackie Chen

英语好的童鞋能帮我看看这篇短文的语法吗?My friend mike is a Movie fan,he likes movies very much.We often go to movies on weekends.He likes all kinds of movies,but action movies are his favorite.He likes the famous actor Jackie Chen
英语好的童鞋能帮我看看这篇短文的语法吗?
My friend mike is a Movie fan,he likes movies very much.We often go to movies on weekends.He likes all kinds of movies,but action movies are his favorite.He likes the famous actor Jackie Chen because he thinks Jakie Chen is not only cool but also hardworking.He act all his movies cannily.Jakie Chen has acted lots of great movies,such as Baby Plan and Rush Hour.Mike likes Baby Plan best,he thinks it’s very funny and successful.But he doesn’t like thrilles because they are too scary,he can’t go to sleep at night.I don’t like them ,too.So we always see action movies.Do you like action movies?If yes,let' see them together!
主要是有没有语法错误,尤其是最后一句话

英语好的童鞋能帮我看看这篇短文的语法吗?My friend mike is a Movie fan,he likes movies very much.We often go to movies on weekends.He likes all kinds of movies,but action movies are his favorite.He likes the famous actor Jackie Chen
My friend mike is a fan of Movie ,and(逗号后应该加适当连词) he likes movies very much.We often go to see(这里to后不可以直接接名词要加个动词) movies on weekends.He likes all kinds of movies,but active movies are his favorite.He likes the famous actor Jackie Chen,because he thinks Jakie Chen is not only cool but also hardworking.He acts all his movies cannily.Jakie Chen has acted lots of great movies,such as (电影名应该加引号或者用大写)'Baby Plan' ,'Rush Hour' and so on(用这个句式比较好).Mike likes the(专有名词前加定冠词) 'Baby Plan' best,(适当连词)because he thinks it’s very funny and successful.But he doesn’t like thrilles because they are too scary to (too…to…句型表示太……以至于不能……你那样说太繁琐了）fall asleep（这个短语表示入睡,更能表达你要表达的意思） at night.I don’t like them ,too.So we always see active movies.Do you like active movies?If you do,let's see them together!
差不多就这样了.你这作文没什么亮点,感觉是小学或初一小孩子的作文,没有长难句也没有地道的短语.建议你平时多看看美剧,多读一些英语精短美文.我是新东方老师,我们新东方有本《生为而赢》你到网上下来背背,之后会有很大帮助.手机帮你改的没太仔细,而且没帮你变成长难句,感觉那样就不像你写的了,基本没什么大问题了.还是要多听多背多看.

是翻译么？
：我的朋友迈克是个影迷,他喜欢电影非常愉快。我们经常在周末去看电影。他喜欢各种电影,但是动作片是他最喜爱的。他喜欢那位著名的演员成龙因为他认为Jakie陈不仅是好,但也勤奋。从他的举止行为他的所有电影的用心。Jakie陈已经采取了许多伟大的电影,如婴儿计划和高峰时间。迈克喜欢孩子最好的,他认为计划很有趣也很成功。但他不喜欢thrilles因为他们太猛,所以他不能去在晚上睡觉。我...

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是翻译么？
：我的朋友迈克是个影迷,他喜欢电影非常愉快。我们经常在周末去看电影。他喜欢各种电影,但是动作片是他最喜爱的。他喜欢那位著名的演员成龙因为他认为Jakie陈不仅是好,但也勤奋。从他的举止行为他的所有电影的用心。Jakie陈已经采取了许多伟大的电影,如婴儿计划和高峰时间。迈克喜欢孩子最好的,他认为计划很有趣也很成功。但他不喜欢thrilles因为他们太猛,所以他不能去在晚上睡觉。我不喜欢,他们也是如此。所以我们总是看动作片。你喜欢动作片吗?如果是,让我们看见他们在一起!

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but action movies are his favorite 可以改为his favarite movies are action movies.
He act all his movies cannily.动词要加s，因为he是第三人称，所以是he acts all his movies cannily.
最后一句If yes, 可以改为 if so 会更好。
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but action movies are his favorite 可以改为his favarite movies are action movies.
He act all his movies cannily.动词要加s，因为he是第三人称，所以是he acts all his movies cannily.
最后一句If yes, 可以改为 if so 会更好。
其他都还可以，因为基本是用简单句表述，所以没有什么大错误。

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but action movie is his favorite;
He likes the famous actor ,Jackie Chen
He acts all his movies cannily.
If you like it , let' see them together!

1。去看电影是，go to movie theatre (cinema).
2。at weekend.
3。He likes all kinds of movies,but action movies are his favorite. 不好。改成：he likes all kinds of movies, while his favorite is action movie.<...

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1。去看电影是，go to movie theatre (cinema).
2。at weekend.
3。He likes all kinds of movies,but action movies are his favorite. 不好。改成：he likes all kinds of movies, while his favorite is action movie.
4。He likes the famous actor Jackie Chen (这里最好有个，)because he thinks Jakie Chen is not only cool but also hardworking. （这里的not only but also用的很别扭，一般拿来连长句的哈，就用and连接比较好）
5。He act all his movies cannily. acts。最好不要这样表达，He likes the famous actor Jackie Chen because he thinks Jakie Chen is not only cool but also hardworking. He act all his movies cannily. 可以换成 he loves the famous actor----Jackie Chen----for his canny performance in all his movies and his hardworking attitude towards his work.
6." " 用
7。 Mike likes Baby Plan best, he thinks it’s very funny and successful. 你的用语里面like和think用得太频繁了，很重复。可以换成he considers it as the funniest and most successful movie of JC.
8.But he doesn’t like thrilles because they are too scary,he can’t go to sleep at night. I don’t like them ,too. 这里得but太多余了，完全和上文没有转折关系，去掉。
9。看电影，watch movies.
10.if the answer is "yes", then shall we watch together and have fun!!

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all kind of ，funny改为fun too 改成either so改成and 最后一句是let's see不过看着还是有点别扭，最好去掉

(*^__^*) 嘻嘻……

改的地方我用的大写 这样你好知道哪有不同
另外有拼写错误/逻辑错误 也改过了
My friend mike is a movie fan, he likes movies very much. We often go to THE movies on weekends. He likes all kinds of movies,but action movies are his f...

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改的地方我用的大写 这样你好知道哪有不同
另外有拼写错误/逻辑错误 也改过了
My friend mike is a movie fan, he likes movies very much. We often go to THE movies on weekends. He likes all kinds of movies,but action movies are his favorite. He likes the famous actor Jackie Chen because he thinks Jakie Chen is not only cool but also hardworking AS AN ACTOR. He PERFORMS CANNILY IN ALL HIS MOVIES. Jakie Chen has acted in A LOT of great movies, such as Baby Plan and Rush Hour. Mike likes Baby Plan best, he thinks it’s very funny and THE MOVIE WAS VERY successful. But he doesn’t like thrillers because they are too scary, he can’t go to sleep at night AFTER WATCHING THEM. I don’t like them either. So we always GO see action movies. Do you like action movies? If yes, let' WATCH them together!

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