求英语高手帮忙找下这篇作文的错误,包括单词拼写,语法,结构,只要是错误就行As we all know,women are totally different from men in many ways,such as the body,face and ways of doing things.Women are more sensitive while men

求英语高手帮忙找下这篇作文的错误,包括单词拼写,语法,结构,只要是错误就行As we all know,women are totally different from men in many ways,such as the body,face and ways of doing things.Women are more sensitive while men
求英语高手帮忙找下这篇作文的错误,包括单词拼写,语法,结构,只要是错误就行
As we all know,women are totally different from men in many ways,such as the body,face and ways of doing things.
Women are more sensitive while men seem more reasonable.We often find that women are more active when they fall in love,but the men always try to keep their own way of life.
A lot of women think that the family is the most important,such as the Japanese,Korean,even some western people.But,in my opinion,most men think that the career is most important.So they may spend more time on job than at home.
Women are more attentive in many ways and men have more strength.So we may find that there are few female sailor and also few male nurses.
In a word,women are very different from men.

求英语高手帮忙找下这篇作文的错误,包括单词拼写,语法,结构,只要是错误就行As we all know,women are totally different from men in many ways,such as the body,face and ways of doing things.Women are more sensitive while men
第三段,the family the career ,都把the 去掉,
第四段,female sailor sailor 应该加S

第二段第一句，应改为“…while men seem to be more reasonable…”

忍不住做了个同题作文，我也是个菜鸟，大家共勉啊～～
As we all know,women are quite different from men in many respects,such as the body structures,the face outlines and the ways of doing things.
Firstly,women are more ...

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忍不住做了个同题作文，我也是个菜鸟，大家共勉啊～～
As we all know,women are quite different from men in many respects,such as the body structures,the face outlines and the ways of doing things.
Firstly,women are more sensitive while men seem to be more reasonable.For example,it is quite common that women are more active than men are when they fall in love.Men just try to keep their life as before.
Secondly,women put more emphasis on families,for instance,Japanese women,Korean women,even some western women quit their jobs after marry.However,men think career as the top important thing in their lives.They used to spending much more time on jobs than at home.
Finally,women are more careful so that a overwhelming proportion of nurses are women.On the other hand,the truth that there is few female sailors indicates that men are stronger than women.
In a word,women are very different from men.

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1.A lot of women think that the family is the most important,应改成A lot of women think that the family is the most important thing，
2.So we may find that there are few female sailor and also few mal...

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1.A lot of women think that the family is the most important,应改成A lot of women think that the family is the most important thing，
2.So we may find that there are few female sailor and also few male nurses.其中的“sailor”应该是“sailors”
3.总体而言，这篇文章的论证和论点“women are very different from men”的关系不太大，一般老师给不了太高的分数，尽管你的语法错误不多。（这只是本人的意见——英语专业研究生）

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As we all known, women are totally different from men in many ways, such as the body, face and ways of doing things.
Women are more sensitive while men seem more reasonable. We often find th...

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As we all known, women are totally different from men in many ways, such as the body, face and ways of doing things.
Women are more sensitive while men seem more reasonable. We often find that women are more active when they fall in love, but men always try to keep their own way of life.
A lot of women think that the family is the most important, such as the Japanese, Korean, even some western people. however, in my opinion, most men think that the career is most important. So they may spend more time on job than at home.
Women are more attentive in many ways while men have more strength. So we may find that there are few female sailor and also few male nurses.
In a word, women are very different from men.

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