英语：帮我修改一下这几句英语.看有没有什么语法错误之类的.When you see this post, perhaps you do not love me, maybe she has occupied most of your life.Thank you for staying with me a year. Although this result isn’t what

英语：帮我修改一下这几句英语.看有没有什么语法错误之类的.When you see this post, perhaps you do not love me, maybe she has occupied most of your life.Thank you for staying with me a year. Although this result isn’t what
英语：帮我修改一下这几句英语.看有没有什么语法错误之类的.
When you see this post, perhaps you do not love me, maybe she has occupied most of your life.
Thank you for staying with me a year. Although this result isn’t what I want
Darling,please allow me to call you like this
It seems impossible.
The end of the story, the best to wish you

英语：帮我修改一下这几句英语.看有没有什么语法错误之类的.When you see this post, perhaps you do not love me, maybe she has occupied most of your life.Thank you for staying with me a year. Although this result isn’t what
呃,这位仁兄,真是一塌糊涂啊,你最好发个中文版本让我给你翻译好了,真不知道你在说什么,句子虽然语法有一些是对的,但是上下文根本无关,东一榔头西一棒槌,简直是...我都看不下去了!
如果坚持要这一版,下面是语法部分的修改,内容上没法改,太乱了
When you see this post,perhaps you do not love me,maybe she has occupied most of your life.不能用逗号连接两个句子,maybe前改成句号
Thank you for staying with me a year.Although this result isn’t what I want（加逗号）
Darling,please allow（allowing） me to call you like this（整个做seems 的主语）It （it去掉）seems impossible.
The end of the story（没谓语,变成everything is over 更爽更直接）,the best to wish you （改成Best wishes to you!做整个句子,不要和前面的连接起来）
呼呼!
累死我鸟!

stay with me for a year
the best wishes to you

When you see this post, perhaps you do not love me, she might has occupied most of your life.
Thank you for have stayed with me for a year, even though this result isn’t what I want, Darling，please allow me to call you like this.
It seems impossible.
The end of the story, the best wish to you！

When you see this post, perhaps you could not love me, maybe she could have occupied most of your life.
Thank you for having stayed with me for a year. Although this result isn’t what I want.
Darling，please allow me to call you like this.
It seems impossible.
At the end of the story, the best wishes to you

有篇英语作文叫 more care for others ，然后 我第一句写了， The Expo hold 改成held 需要空格把财富给我吧，急用 be held ，被动语态，be