求帮忙修改一篇英语作文whenever i am asked what i 'd like to do in my spare time ,i'll not hesitate a moment to say that i love travelinglast year,l had a short visit to Beijing with my family.it was my first time to get there,so i was curi

求帮忙修改一篇英语作文whenever i am asked what i 'd like to do in my spare time ,i'll not hesitate a moment to say that i love travelinglast year,l had a short visit to Beijing with my family.it was my first time to get there,so i was curi
求帮忙修改一篇英语作文
whenever i am asked what i 'd like to do in my spare time ,i'll not hesitate a moment to say that i love traveling
last year,l had a short visit to Beijing with my family.it was my first time to get there,so i was curious about this city and visited the palaces of historical interest(要不要大写).when the Great wall appeared in front of us,we couldn't help thinking how wonderful it is!it is said you can see it from the space.although this is false（这里我想说明这句话是错误的,能否用false）,i’m (这里需要用过去式吗)still proud of it
i enioy（这里需要用过去式吗 ） every minutes of this trip.it was really an unforgettable experience

求帮忙修改一篇英语作文whenever i am asked what i 'd like to do in my spare time ,i'll not hesitate a moment to say that i love travelinglast year,l had a short visit to Beijing with my family.it was my first time to get there,so i was curi
Whenver i.i dont hesitate a moment to express my deep love for travelling.
last year,i paid a short visit to Beijing ,Great Wall with my family.
it was my first time when i had such opportunity to Beijing that i was greatly curious about the city and historical sites.
it is said that it can be seen from the height of space,even if it was proved a wrong rumor,
it remains to be a proud in my deep hearts.
every minute of this trip was really an unforgettable experience.

错的地方非常多，用词也很多错误，你应该才没学多久把，要改的话全部都得改了。。就这样吧， hesitate 这个词你仔细看下词性，不是这么用的还有can't help doing这绝对算是强用了，嗯。。。就说这两个吧，没事，初学么，买本语法书看看把

whenever i am asked，“ what i 'd like to do in my spare time？”i'll not hesitate a moment to say that i love travelling
last year, l had a short visit to Beijing with my family. it was my first time...

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whenever i am asked，“ what i 'd like to do in my spare time？”i'll not hesitate a moment to say that i love travelling
last year, l had a short visit to Beijing with my family. it was my first time there,so i was curious about this city. I visited the palaces of historical interest.When the Great wall appeared in front of us,we couldn't help thinking how wonderful it is!it is said you can see it from the moon.
i enioyed every minutes of this trip.it was really an unforgettable experience

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你可以尝试用简单句，因为简单句不容易错，更容易懂。我也简单的崩你改一下吧。呵呵
If you asked me what is the most thing l want to do in my spare time, l will tell you withou delay, the ting is travling.
last year, l had a sshort vis...

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你可以尝试用简单句，因为简单句不容易错，更容易懂。我也简单的崩你改一下吧。呵呵
If you asked me what is the most thing l want to do in my spare time, l will tell you withou delay, the ting is travling.
last year, l had a sshort visit to Beijing with my family, it was the first time to get there, so l was cerious about that city. l visited the Palaces of Histirical Interest. When the Great Wall appeared in front of us,we couldn't help thinking how wonderful it is! it is said you can see it from the out space, although the fact is not so, l am still prod of it.
L enjoyed every minites of this trip. it was an unforgettable experience.

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