大型英文大赛朗诵组自我介绍（听听大家意见）Good morning ,everyone! It's my honour to stand here to introduce myself.My name is Zhang Tianlong.My friends call me Robin.I'm ___years old. There are three people in my family. Thay are

大型英文大赛朗诵组自我介绍（听听大家意见）Good morning ,everyone! It's my honour to stand here to introduce myself.My name is Zhang Tianlong.My friends call me Robin.I'm ___years old. There are three people in my family. Thay are
大型英文大赛朗诵组自我介绍（听听大家意见）
Good morning ,everyone! It's my honour to stand here to introduce myself.My name is Zhang Tianlong.My friends call me Robin.I'm ___years old. There are three people in my family. Thay are father mother and I. I think the meaning of FAMILY is"Father and Mother I Love You". Now, I am studying in _____ primary School.People say I'm a lovely boy with a sweet smile .In my spare time,I like ________(例如reading books).Of course,I like challenging myself,so I take part in the competition to become a master of a foreign language. I like making friends,I hope I can learn from all the other contestants in this competition.Now, I'll tell you a story about______
大型英文大赛小学A组 朗诵自我介绍,看看大家的意见,请指正!感谢!
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大型英文大赛朗诵组自我介绍（听听大家意见）Good morning ,everyone! It's my honour to stand here to introduce myself.My name is Zhang Tianlong.My friends call me Robin.I'm ___years old. There are three people in my family. Thay are
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Good morning ,everyone!It's my honour to stand here to tell you something about me（虽是“自我介绍”,但换成tell you something about me更符合英语的习惯） .My name is Zhang Tianlong,and you can call me Robin.I'm ___years old.There are three people in my family,my father,my mother and I（这样表达更简洁,地道）.I think the meaning of FAMILY should be"Father and Mother,I Love You".I love my parents and they love me too(加上此句,以承接上面family的含义) Now,I am studying in _____ Primary (某学校的首字母要大写)School.（People say 省去,“人们说...”是汉语的说法,直译成英语显得别扭）I'm a lovely boy with a sweet smile .In my spare time,I like ________(例如reading books).Of course,I like challenging myself ,so I take part in the competition and try to become a master of a foreign language.I like making friends too（加上too更显英语味道）,I hope I can make friends with you(加上此句以承上启下) and learn from all of you(虽然是像其它选手学习是你心里的话,可说出来不必说得那么具体,用 all of you涵盖,既得体,又大气) in this competition.Now,I'll tell you a story about______.

Thay are father mother and I. 改成me

Thay are father mother and I
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Thay are my father my mother and I。
其余还是很完美的。

小学生自我介绍，这样已经非常不错了，我觉得可以，没啥可吹毛求疵的

There are three people in my family, my father, mother and I.
I like challenging myself,so I took part in the competition to become a master in this foreign language.

Good morning ，everyone! It's my honour to stand here to introduce myself (正式场合你这么说其实蛮好).
My name is Zhang Tianlong, and you can call me Robin (习惯是这么说的).
I'm ___years old. There are three peop...

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Good morning ，everyone! It's my honour to stand here to introduce myself (正式场合你这么说其实蛮好).
My name is Zhang Tianlong, and you can call me Robin (习惯是这么说的).
I'm ___years old. There are three people in my family - my father, my mother and I (简洁, 符合习惯).
I think the meaning of FAMILY is "Father and Mother I Love You". Now, I am studying in _____ Primary School. I'm a lovely boy with sweet smile (去掉People say和a).
In my spare time, I like ________(例如reading books).(reading就行了, 不要加books)
What is more (这里的of course我觉得太突然了, 改成What is more)，
I like challenging myself, and the reason I take part in the competition is I desire to become a master of a foreign language (你原来的句子意思有点怪我觉得, 因为参加比赛不能让你成为master, 而是你想要要成为master, 因此才去参加比赛, 所以我帮你改成这样).
I like making friends (这一句你要么放到In my spare time, I like____那里去, 要么删掉, making friends和reading可以放一起, 但是challenging myself和这两个是有不同的, 单独拿出来放在那两个后面逻辑会通顺一点, 况且making friends和后面一句话关联不大),
I hope and I also believe this competition will be a good opptunity for me to learn much from all of you (这句改成这样, 和I like challenging myself...那句话在一起意思更连贯).
Now, I'll tell you a story about______
小朋友已经很牛逼了, 我也就是跟你瞎扯...自己鉴别=. =

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句式没有变化，以i开头太多，
Hello,girls and boys,ladies and gentlemen!Do you think I'm a big sun boy（偷笑）？Zhang tianlong is my name,haha,but friends call me Robin，you know a tallent part .I have been in the wor...

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句式没有变化，以i开头太多，
Hello,girls and boys,ladies and gentlemen!Do you think I'm a big sun boy（偷笑）？Zhang tianlong is my name,haha,but friends call me Robin，you know a tallent part .I have been in the world for 9 years,ho i see it is a long time before you know me today,but it is not too late,(偷笑）。There are another two person in our family:mama,and dad ."Father and Mother I Love You"(大声）It's the meaning of family i think(小声神秘的说）. _____ primary School I study there.The people there say I'm a lovely boy with a sweet smile.(展现笑容）.In my spare time ,reading books it's favourt.Today I come here ,because I want to make friends and learn from all the other contestants,also challeng myself.And I bring a story : 展现阳光调皮可爱的一面 ，表情跟上，自然的，不是背稿，要把诵读的变成自己的一部分，加油↖(^ω^)↗！

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很不错了，比起我以前强好多！真的Very good

转折部分非常牵强，句子和句子的含义完全没有衔接的地方。如果我是评委，我会说这是堆积句子，不是一段自我介绍。比如说，“我喜欢读书。当然，我也喜欢挑战自我......”，中文演讲比赛中谁会这么说话呢。还有“FAMILY”的含义，“父亲母亲我爱你”，说完了含义至少应该把话题转到自己身上吧，比如说加上“我爱我的父母/我爱我的家”之类的，怎么直愣愣的就跳到我在哪里哪里读书了呢。
另外，“so I t...

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转折部分非常牵强，句子和句子的含义完全没有衔接的地方。如果我是评委，我会说这是堆积句子，不是一段自我介绍。比如说，“我喜欢读书。当然，我也喜欢挑战自我......”，中文演讲比赛中谁会这么说话呢。还有“FAMILY”的含义，“父亲母亲我爱你”，说完了含义至少应该把话题转到自己身上吧，比如说加上“我爱我的父母/我爱我的家”之类的，怎么直愣愣的就跳到我在哪里哪里读书了呢。
另外，“so I take part in the competition to become a master of a foreign language”，参赛并不代表能成为英语大师啊。如果评委是中国人，也许能接受，如果是外国人，这句话本身逻辑就不对。
自我介绍就该达到介绍自己的目的，而不是堆砌自己会的句子。

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小学A组 就是一年级, 能说这些已经很棒了

对于小学生来说不错了~~

3行they打错了
I think the meaning of FAMILY is"Father and Mother I Love You". 这句是不是有点问题？
People say 这里最好把say改为said
总的来说不错了
祝你成功！！！