请大家帮我看看英语作文的错误并指出改正,The impact of the internet on the way people communicateThe picture is about a father and a mother writing a letter for their son who addicted to the screen.From this picture we can find the i

请大家帮我看看英语作文的错误并指出改正,The impact of the internet on the way people communicateThe picture is about a father and a mother writing a letter for their son who addicted to the screen.From this picture we can find the i
请大家帮我看看英语作文的错误并指出改正,
The impact of the internet on the way people communicate
The picture is about a father and a mother writing a letter for their son who addicted to the screen.From this picture we can find the impact of the internet on the way people communicate.Maybe you will think it is unthinkable ,because their son who is just in the upstairs.But now with online chat is developing ,it will be a nomol thing.
Why more and more people like use online chat instead face-to-face contact?I think it is easy to explain it .On the one hand ,online chat is more convenient than face-to-face contact.Our phone and computer both have a chat tool.You can do it everywhere and any time if you want.On the other hand ,the online chat is a modern thing .So young people think online chat is cool .
In my opion ,I do not think the electronic communication can replace face-to-face contact.Because online chat can not perfect show people real idea like someone who is express his love.

请大家帮我看看英语作文的错误并指出改正,The impact of the internet on the way people communicateThe picture is about a father and a mother writing a letter for their son who addicted to the screen.From this picture we can find the i

write a letter to sb.for要改成to

who is addicted to the internet.或者who has internet addiction.(who引导的是一个句子,要有动词),还是说其实画面应该是e-mail啊,信和邮件还是有点不一样的.e-mail更加明确.如果是邮件的话.

unreasonable,不合理的,代替unthinkable,会好点吧.

upstairs已经是副词了,不需要再加in这个介词了.

But as chatting online becomes more and more popular,it is becoming a normal thing.

Why do.,疑问句,在疑问词后面放动词

instead of contacting to each other face to face

I think 开头的句子没有必要.其实英语里面比较少用设问的形式的.可以说There are reasons why people...

any time any where/whenever wherever possible.不限时间和地点主要是指网络使得空间距离感减小吧.With the help of internet we can chat with people who are maybe far away or even strangers,that means we can get to know people from different cultures through internet. 

People could feel and know better when people contact each other face to face,so communication would be more efficient.Besides peole can touch each other,which is very important in communication. 

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1)你的题目想说互联网改变人与人交流方式，但你文章的结尾似乎在说明互联网无力改变的。你不应该在文章的最后结论部分突然想起来你的题目其实不合适。要么修改题目要么修改结论。
2）文章的开头换成：imagine that: ....这样比“picture is ”要有力

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