托福作文求大神修改和建议Telling the truth ,in modern society,is regarded as key to sustain every relationship .Form that ,we could see being faithful to people is a top idea today .But the there are several questions might make people con

托福作文求大神修改和建议Telling the truth ,in modern society,is regarded as key to sustain every relationship .Form that ,we could see being faithful to people is a top idea today .But the there are several questions might make people con
托福作文求大神修改和建议
Telling the truth ,in modern society,is regarded as key to sustain every relationship .Form that ,we could see being faithful to people is a top idea today .But the there are several questions might make people confused ,the first is that is telling the truth always a good way to sustain the relationship?and the second :is it every relationship worthwhile to tell the absolute truth?And the answers are worth a profound consideration
First of all ,in my consideration ,every problem has its unique solution ,which means you have to change according to the different situation .In a word ,telling the truth sometimes does work but sometimes it does not .In some certain condition ,it may become a sort of damage to relationship because some truth could not be accepted by people in short time ,therefore white lie is actually necessary to protect relationship form destroying it .
An illustrating instance could prove what i said ,my girlfriend participated a part time job and really suffered a tough weeks in order to buy a expensive skirt ,she made it finally and aked for my comment ,actually i thought that one is not good at all ,but i still said i love it because if i told her truth ,that equals put her in embarrassing position ,which adversely might give our relationship a tough time ,which is entirely opposed to my expectation of improving relationship .
Secondly ,i believe not all the relationship worth telling truth all the time ,as a old Chinese saying goes by,one should always guard against the harm that others might do to him ,that is to warn people some bad guys would take advantage of your faith to do something harmful for you ,people are supposed protect their own privacy from people you just meet or even have no idea who he is
In conclusion ,it is a big world that full of various people ,we are supposed to identify which relationship is important to us and which is not or even harmful ,as for the important one to value ,we are also supposed to be more flexible depend on certain condition to protect your friends or other people to maintain the relationship
题目是tpo2 Always telling the truth is the most important consideration in any relationship between people

托福作文求大神修改和建议Telling the truth ,in modern society,is regarded as key to sustain every relationship .Form that ,we could see being faithful to people is a top idea today .But the there are several questions might make people con

第一段一二句没有逻辑联系.你提出的topic要在下文环环相扣的进行解释,你要问自己why?then what?老外不是我们,他们从来不懂模糊的推论.你的A,只能得到B,不能得到C.

基本语法错误,不够仔细.知道cs句子不,两个句子之间不能用逗号连接,你看第一段里有没有这种初级语法错误?老外读到此处可能会误解,这不是口语section,不能犯这种错误.

第二段第一句话恕我没能理解什么叫unique situation 在我看来你这段是打哈哈的废话,可以删除.托福文章的段式,最好是开头intro,中间两个body段,然后结尾.你这段没有把你的立场说清楚,而且绕.在intro段里面,必须明确指出你的supporting idea,你用两个论点,列子来论述你的观点（托福主要考这个）而且必须条理清晰.所以不要这段,下面的两端body paragraph你应当在每段开头表明你这一段的中心,而且你的论证必须是你在intro里提到的那两个论点

看到第三段我郁闷了,所以你的topic,你对于这个topic的态度到底是支持还是反对?托福考试如果选中立牌的话会很难的高分,应为你必须把两边的观点都解释清楚,还要有让步段等等,很麻烦,所以你最好以后选一边立场写文.

你的第三段缺少细节.知道吗,托福文章最重要的就是两个body段落,你把这两个段落敷衍过去,考官还看什么...所谓细节,就是展开,你要描绘一件绘声绘色的事情,不是你女朋友要买东西（买什么?）你的描述过于平淡,而且如果去掉第二段你字数就明显不够了.所以说要想把段落展开,细节描写必须出来.同样的意思用不同的词去表达.对你的词汇量要求也是比较大的

第四段空谈理不谈例子的一个坏处就是容易大空,无效.而且还没有细节.不是说不能引用,但是你最好谈谈自己对这个的看法啊,是什么让你如此感受颇深,你的列子很重要

结尾基本ok.还是我说的,最好不要中立.还有,语法你总是喜欢cs,人称变来变去,改掉这些初级错误

你现在的问题总结就是,词汇不够,逻辑不清,语法漏洞,缺乏例子,加油,我当时托福写作也是挣扎了很久才打到高分,关键多写,不要怕暴露问题.我托福110 你有什么不懂还可以问我

多用点平时不常见的替代词