【急】英语好的朋友进来帮个忙!我写了这篇英语作文,水平虽然不高,但还是没有十足的把握,想请诸位帮忙检查一下,有错误请指出来,包括词汇、短语、语法等等,谢谢了!My parents have been very nic

【急】英语好的朋友进来帮个忙!我写了这篇英语作文,水平虽然不高,但还是没有十足的把握,想请诸位帮忙检查一下,有错误请指出来,包括词汇、短语、语法等等,谢谢了!My parents have been very nic
【急】英语好的朋友进来帮个忙!
我写了这篇英语作文,水平虽然不高,但还是没有十足的把握,想请诸位帮忙检查一下,有错误请指出来,包括词汇、短语、语法等等,谢谢了!
My parents have been very nice to me. You know, I grew up in poor health and (I ?可否省略?) rarely went to school. So whenever I was ill, they all looked after me so much and taught my homework at home. So I always think my parents were harder than others. Now my body has been restored were getting better and better and I already have a self-learning ability. But I’m so moved whenever I think of those things.
But there were differences between us about the freedom. They think I’m so young that shouldn’t out to play with friends, such as have a party. I am not rebel, but at that time, I really couldn’t understand them. But today I see, the community is complex, I’m so important to them that I mustn’t have a little dangerous.
I will work hard to be an obedient child.
另外,我很急,周三就要用,谢谢!

【急】英语好的朋友进来帮个忙!我写了这篇英语作文,水平虽然不高,但还是没有十足的把握,想请诸位帮忙检查一下,有错误请指出来,包括词汇、短语、语法等等,谢谢了!My parents have been very nic
have been 改为always be；
they all looked after me so much中so much用法不对,改为They just take good care of me,without any complain;
taught my homework at home.太生硬,你提到不去学校,再说at home多余they tought me about my homework,told me the skill of study,
So I always think my parents were harder than others.think改为thinking that,others改为others’,与my对等
restored 是重建,用recovered,恢复健康的意思,后面的were去掉,不对,用and.Now my body has been recovered and getting better and better .
and I already have a self-learning ability.改为Now,I can study by myself,比较地道
I’m so 改为I still so those things改为those days.更有感情色彩
But there were differences between us about the freedom.别用but了,用太多,however表转折,however,there were still some differences between us about the freedom.
shouldn’t out 改为shouldn’t go out
have a party 改为 having a party
I am not rebel,有点重,I need my own space,my own time,
But today I see,改为Time gose by,today I see
I mustn’t have a little dangerous改为I couldn’t have any danger,dangerous是形容词
obedient 你又不是父母的奴隶,改成good,有时候最简单的词,表达最深刻的意思.比较地道
以上仅是个人鄙见,取其精华,去其糟粕吧,希望帮得到你!

我在想 要不要把第一句的时态改一下？现在完成时就意味着某种状态到此结束。。直接用一般现在时就很ok，没有必要那么复杂的。 仅供参考

My parents have been very kind to me. You know, I grew up in poor health Rarely go to school. Therefore, whenever I was sick, they take care of me so much at home taught me lessons. Therefore, I have...

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My parents have been very kind to me. You know, I grew up in poor health Rarely go to school. Therefore, whenever I was sick, they take care of me so much at home taught me lessons. Therefore, I have always thought that my parents even more difficult than others. Now my body has been restored to getting better and better, I already have a self-learning ability. However, I am touched whenever I feel these things.
However, the differences between us, with regard to freedom. They think I'm too young and should not go out to play a friend, such as a party. I am not anti-government militants, but at that time, I really do not understand. But today, I saw, and society is complex, I am so important to them, I am not a little dangerous.
I will work hard to become an obedient child.
正确的英语版

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