【急】英语好的朋友进来帮个忙!我写了这篇英语作文,水平虽然不高,但还是没有十足的把握,想请诸位帮忙检查一下,有错误请指出来,包括词汇、短语、语法等等,I've had no friends.Because I grew up i

【急】英语好的朋友进来帮个忙!我写了这篇英语作文,水平虽然不高,但还是没有十足的把握,想请诸位帮忙检查一下,有错误请指出来,包括词汇、短语、语法等等,I've had no friends.Because I grew up i
【急】英语好的朋友进来帮个忙!
我写了这篇英语作文,水平虽然不高,但还是没有十足的把握,想请诸位帮忙检查一下,有错误请指出来,包括词汇、短语、语法等等,
I've had no friends.Because I grew up in poor health and I rarely went to school.But since I came to this school,I have made many friends.They are very take care of me,I am moved by their concerns and affection.so I want to talk about one of them.
She is a very cheerful girl,and she often helps me.For example,I feel my English is not good,and then she told me a lot about how to learn English better.Once my finger was burnt,then she went to buy medication for me without telling me.I was so moved that I had not word to say anything.
I always think that I'm a introverted and shy girl.she made me open my mind to more people.
1楼的朋友谢谢你，但是你扭曲了我的部分意思。
3楼的朋友，我看得很明白，但是我不清楚一点：“They cake care of me badily”这句cake或许是你拼错了，这我看得懂，但是我想问一下badily是什么意思？抱歉我没能查到。周三我就要用了，希望你能早点看到我的补充：

【急】英语好的朋友进来帮个忙!我写了这篇英语作文,水平虽然不高,但还是没有十足的把握,想请诸位帮忙检查一下,有错误请指出来,包括词汇、短语、语法等等,I've had no friends.Because I grew up i
还行啦 基本上没问题,2楼的改错很不靠谱,楼主要有信心,我把原则性错误的地方改一下吧（有问题的地方我用【】标记,改在后面的括号里）
I've had no friends.Because I grew up in poor health and I rarely went to school.But since I came to this school,I have made many friends.【They are very take care of me】（They cake care of me badily）,I am moved by their 【concerns】（concern不是可数名词） and affection.so I want to talk about one of them.
She is a very cheerful girl,and she often helps me.For example,I feel my English 【is】（is去掉,not good 直接是feel的表语或者前面的feel改成think） not good,and then she told me a lot about how to learn English better.Once my finger 【was burnt】(got burnt),then she went to buy medication for me without telling me.I was so moved that I had 【not】（no） word to say anything.
I always think that I'm a introverted and shy girl.she made me 【 open】（to open,让某人做某事make sb to do sth.） my mind to more people.

I've had no friends.Because I grew up in poor health and I rarely
第一句时态不对，I don't any friends 在第二句中and之后的I有点赘述，可去
went to school.But since I came to this school,I have made many
掉
fr...

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I've had no friends.Because I grew up in poor health and I rarely
第一句时态不对，I don't any friends 在第二句中and之后的I有点赘述，可去
went to school.But since I came to this school,I have made many
掉
friends.They are very take care of me, I am moved by their concerns
这一句应改为They take care of me much,之后的句子中的concern是
and affection.so I want to talk about one of them.
不可数的，不可以加s
She is a very cheerful girl,and she often helps me.For example,I feel
在这句中，前后时态
my English is not good,and then she told me a lot about how to learn
应保持一致，应将feel改为felt
English better.Once my finger was burnt,then she went to buy
medication for me without telling me.I was so moved that I had not
medicine
word to say anything.
anything应去掉
I always think that I'm a introverted and shy girl.she made me open
It's she who make
my mind to more people.
me open my mind to more people这么该客气强调作用，而且应保持时态一致

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I didn't have any friends. Because I grew up in poor health and i rarely went to shool. Since I came to this school, I have made many frends. They take care of me so much, and I appreciate them about ...

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I didn't have any friends. Because I grew up in poor health and i rarely went to shool. Since I came to this school, I have made many frends. They take care of me so much, and I appreciate them about looking after me, so I want to talk about one of them. she is very cheerful girl, and she often helps me. For example, I was not in English, and she told me a lot about how to learn English. Once my finger was burnt, she bought the medicine for me, I didn't know she did till a long time after. I should thank her so much.
I always think that I'm a introverted and shy girl.she made me open my mind to more people.

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3楼的意思是badly糟糕的意思.他打错了