求英语大神帮我修改文章语法错误As my classmate said,"silence is golden." That is,people with fewer words could do right things.As we all know,we can make better decision after enough thinking.For example,when you meet a guy the first ti

求英语大神帮我修改文章语法错误As my classmate said,"silence is golden." That is,people with fewer words could do right things.As we all know,we can make better decision after enough thinking.For example,when you meet a guy the first ti
求英语大神帮我修改文章语法错误
As my classmate said,"silence is golden." That is,people with fewer words could do right things.As we all know,we can make better decision after enough thinking.For example,when you meet a guy the first time and he is rude to you,your attitudes toward him depend on what kind of personality you have.If you are talkative,you may yell at him immediately.If you are introverted,you probably observe him for a while and figure out why he behaves that way.His impolite behavior may result from many reasons,such as failing a test.Keeping silence,in this case,it allows you to avoid an unnecessary quarrel.However,making our voice heard also plays an essential role.For instance,when you hold a different opinion from your group members in a discussion class,you should express what you think instead of being guided to do whatever they want.
连接词都用下划线标出来,文章不需要大幅度修改,只要把语法错误都纠正过来就行了

求英语大神帮我修改文章语法错误As my classmate said,"silence is golden." That is,people with fewer words could do right things.As we all know,we can make better decision after enough thinking.For example,when you meet a guy the first ti
写的很好,语法问题不多,如下括号里是修改,希望可以帮到你,
As my classmate said,"silence is golden." That is,people with fewer words could do right things.As we all know,we can make better （decisions） after enough thinking.For example,when you meet a guy the first time and he is rude to you,your （attitude towards） him （depends） on what kind of personality you have.If you are talkative,you may yell at him immediately.If you are introverted,you probably observe him for a while and figure out why he behaves that way.His impolite behavior may result from many reasons,such as failing a test.Keeping silence,in this case,it allows you to avoid an unnecessary quarrel.However,making our voice heard also （playing） an essential role.For instance,when you hold a different opinion from your group members in a discussion class,you should express what you think instead of being guided to do whatever they want.

像我的同学说:“沉默是金。“那是,人们用更少的字可以做正确的事情。我们都知道,我们可以做出更好的决定,在足够的思考。例如,当你遇到一个男人,他是第一次对你粗鲁,你对他的态度取决于你有什么样的个性。如果你是健谈,你可以立即对他大吼。如果你是内向的,你可能会观察他一段时间,明白他为什么表现得这样。他的不礼貌行为可能源于很多原因,比如考试不及格。保持沉默,在这种情况下,它可以让你避免不必要的争吵。然而,...

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像我的同学说:“沉默是金。“那是,人们用更少的字可以做正确的事情。我们都知道,我们可以做出更好的决定,在足够的思考。例如,当你遇到一个男人,他是第一次对你粗鲁,你对他的态度取决于你有什么样的个性。如果你是健谈,你可以立即对他大吼。如果你是内向的,你可能会观察他一段时间,明白他为什么表现得这样。他的不礼貌行为可能源于很多原因,比如考试不及格。保持沉默,在这种情况下,它可以让你避免不必要的争吵。然而,让我们的声音也起着至关重要的作用。例如,当你持有不同意见你的小组成员在讨论类,你应该表达你所想的而不是被引导去做任何他们想要的

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Silence is gold.
That is to say,
Keeping silence, in this case, it allows you to avoid an unnecessary quarrel. it是多余的。