求帮忙看一下小弟的英语作文,有什么语法,用词错误的请指示修改下.3QDear sir,I’m a student at Ningbo University .On summer vacation ,I have a lots of time to do something what I like to do.I think I should have a part-time j

求帮忙看一下小弟的英语作文,有什么语法,用词错误的请指示修改下.3QDear sir,I’m a student at Ningbo University .On summer vacation ,I have a lots of time to do something what I like to do.I think I should have a part-time j
求帮忙看一下小弟的英语作文,有什么语法,用词错误的请指示修改下.3Q
Dear sir,
I’m a student at Ningbo University .On summer vacation ,I have a lots of time to do something what I like to do.
I think I should have a part-time job during the coming summer vacation.
In free time ,I like to do something about computer .So I think I will do well if I get the job .
I hope you will give me a chance to do it .If you think it will be ok ,please call 631059.
Thank you for reading this letter .I’m looking forward to your reply.
Your’s
Huang

求帮忙看一下小弟的英语作文,有什么语法,用词错误的请指示修改下.3QDear sir,I’m a student at Ningbo University .On summer vacation ,I have a lots of time to do something what I like to do.I think I should have a part-time j
Dear sir,
I’m a student in Ningbo University .On summer vacation ,I have a lot of time to do whatever I like to do.
I think I should have a part-time job during the coming summer vacation.
In my free time ,I'd like to do something about computer .So I think I will do it well when I get the job .
I hope you will give me a chance to do it . If it is ok ,please call 631059.
Thank you for reading this letter .I’m looking forward to your reply.
Your’s
Huang

,I have a lots of time to do something what I like to do.这句话不是很好。
a lot of=lots of 没有 a lots of.
plenty of在英语中显得比较得意
一个富有的人说Today,I got plenty of money.
…something what I like to do…

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,I have a lots of time to do something what I like to do.这句话不是很好。
a lot of=lots of 没有 a lots of.
plenty of在英语中显得比较得意
一个富有的人说Today,I got plenty of money.
…something what I like to do…
something which I like to doing.Or
something I enjoy to do/I enjoy doing.
I think I should have a part-time job during the coming summer vacation. In free time ,I like to do something about computer .
I should take a part-time job…
你的coming想表达什么，夏令营的开始吗。
during the brginning of the summer vacation…
at free time.I would like to…
.So I think I will do well if I get the job . I hope you will give me a chance to do it
I think I will work hard if get the job.Or
I think I will be able to be competent of the job if I get it.
I hope you would give me a chance …
I hope you will be pleased when I filling this job.
基本没大错误，不过语言表达过生硬。
慢慢来，你需要的是更多积累

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Dear sir,
I’m a student from Ningbo University .During the summer break , rether than spending the summer without doing anything, i prefer to do something that i wished.
In my free time ,I li...

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Dear sir,
I’m a student from Ningbo University .During the summer break , rether than spending the summer without doing anything, i prefer to do something that i wished.
In my free time ,I like to do something with computer (repairing, programing, ect.)So I think I will do well if I get some jobs that related.
I hope you will give me a chance to try it. If you think it is possible, please call 631059
Thank you for reading this letter .I’m looking forward to your reply.
Your’s
Huang

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