英语ps最后3段- -Undeniably,interesting games can bring me so much joy,but it is a diminutive part of computer.I also high on solving problems by using computer,and programming can help me a lot.I began programming a year ago.Now,I have familiar

英语ps最后3段- -Undeniably,interesting games can bring me so much joy,but it is a diminutive part of computer.I also high on solving problems by using computer,and programming can help me a lot.I began programming a year ago.Now,I have familiar
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Undeniably,interesting games can bring me so much joy,but it is a diminutive part of computer.I also high on solving problems by using computer,and programming can help me a lot.I began programming a year ago.Now,I have familiar with Visual basic and I create a couple of useful programs for myself,such as a program that can check whether my answer to the algebraic equation is correct.These programs not only assist me a lot,but also enhance my programming skill.
Outside the college,I like sports and music. I love badminton and tennis.My father is keen on badminton,so he taught me to play badminton when I was very young,and i found that badminton was so interesting,so I insist to play badminton an hour with my father everyday.I play tennis because I watched a match between Federer and Nadal,their wonderful performance let me instantly fell in love with tennis.I have played tennis for about 4 years and now I play tennis with coach and other teenagers 2 hours every weekend. Music seems has magic for me,when l hear fair-sounding songs,1 can not help it,I will be attracted deeply.Music can let me forget other things,only focus on it,so that music is a good way for me to relax myself.
I trust I am an ideal candidate to get the qualification of computer science because of my enthusiasm for computer and my thinking capacity which fostered by science.These can drive me to obtain great consequence and combine them to the university study.

英语ps最后3段- -Undeniably,interesting games can bring me so much joy,but it is a diminutive part of computer.I also high on solving problems by using computer,and programming can help me a lot.I began programming a year ago.Now,I have familiar
Now,I am familiar with Visual basic and I create a couple of useful programs for myself；so music is a good way for me to relax myself.；These can drive me to obtain great consequences and combine them to the university study.；
以上是这段我改的,下面提一条建议,可能这个在国内不是太注重
在句式的选择方面这篇文章可能还不够丰富,没有一般的主谓宾、虚拟、各种从句、倒装、非谓语的前置等等特殊句式的穿插使用,这可能是一点小的瑕疵吧,如果这么样可能会更加有利于得高分.