英语小作文,检查语法书写错误,Basically,the picture vividly portrays a scene that two persons are confused and startling about the words in the advertising board,which conveys an another frightened meaning—sale of death bodies,instead of

英语小作文,检查语法书写错误,Basically,the picture vividly portrays a scene that two persons are confused and startling about the words in the advertising board,which conveys an another frightened meaning—sale of death bodies,instead of
英语小作文,检查语法书写错误,
Basically,the picture vividly portrays a scene that two persons are confused and startling about the words in the advertising board,which conveys an another frightened meaning—sale of death bodies,instead of the topic of exhibition and selling goods.Apparently,the drawer is telling us the bad consequences of using words improperly and wrongly.
Beyond any doubt,the cartoon has subtly mirrored the in-depth implication that we need to have a right use of characters in our daily life,especially when engaging in other affairs in society.There are ,I reckon,at least two reasons accounting for such phenomenon of wrong applying to words and characters.For one thing,the careless attitude and poor awareness of some persons,lead to appearance of false gathered verbs—as the workers of making the board in the picture; for another one,some departments or firms do not give a sufficient focus on the code of the words,in which case the character use becomes to be more disorganized.Trying to rethink it,we will suffer from many unnecessary matters and problems if we let this situation continue as it is.
From my perspective,we can take some positive steps to curb this problem ,such as improving cultural and educational extent of workers ,or taking proper measures to supervise whether words are used right or not.I believe a good cultural atmosphere is awaiting us if we achieve progress in using and writing words.
这我应考写的作文,高手批评指正 感激!

英语小作文,检查语法书写错误,Basically,the picture vividly portrays a scene that two persons are confused and startling about the words in the advertising board,which conveys an another frightened meaning—sale of death bodies,instead of
可以看出你的英文水平还是比较高的.但是仍然有一些问题.首先,第一段你的句子太长了,就算是国外大学的论文都很少写这种一口气读不完的句子,建议你把第一句话断成两句,你这种从句中用从句的写法是不可取的.作文应该简洁明了,而不是秀从句,而且很容易出错.其中一些很小的语法错误我也帮你改了：Basically,the picture vividly portrays a scene that two persons are confused and startling about the words in the advertising board.The board,however,conveys another frightening meaning — sale of death bodies instead of normal goods.Apparently,the drawer is telling us the serious consequences of using words improperly and wrongly.
第二段里面for another one,其实只需要for another就可以了.后面do not give a sufficent focus on,这个用法很中式,地道用法是pay sufficient/enough attention to.我不是很理解你这里the code of the words的意思,我觉得你可以改成the meaning of the words可能更直接.后面的becomes to be这里明显重复了,直接用becomes就可以了.后面的trying to rethink,还是很中式,改成on my second thought比较地道.
第三段positive steps,改为positive actions,后面的extent你想表达的意思是程度水平,应该用level,cultural and educational level是正确的用法.后面used right or nor改成used correctly or not比较好.后面的atmosphere改成environment.我就找出这么多地方,你可以自己再多读几遍.