检查英语作文After the story”Under The Moon”This is a Science fiction about the earth.Kaih and rilla are leading actor.There are working in spaceship OM-45.One day,the satellite gave some diffenert number about the AOL.they found the AOL is

检查英语作文After the story”Under The Moon”This is a Science fiction about the earth.Kaih and rilla are leading actor.There are working in spaceship OM-45.One day,the satellite gave some diffenert number about the AOL.they found the AOL is
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After the story”Under The Moon”
This is a Science fiction about the earth.
Kaih and rilla are leading actor.There are working in spaceship OM-45.One day,the satellite gave some diffenert number about the AOL.they found the AOL is breaking up.
The Earth ia at risk.so they want to see the commander of Earth and talk about this problem.
the Earth commander called Gog is the richest man on Earth and the worst man on Earth.Two years ago ,a man named Adai has found the hole in the AOL,and he told to the Gog because he wanted more money for the AOL.but Earth commander was very angil,he sent Adai to the colony under the Moon.why the earth commander did that,because he dosen’t like the earth,he want to live in Mars,he is making a spaceship for Mars.
On the way,kaih and rilla saw the commander of Australia,.he is a kind man,he love the earth—he want to protect this planet.so he want to help kaih and rilla.
When kaih and rilla saw the earth commander—Gog and after talk,Gog was very angry and put him in prison.
Everyone hate Gog.when Zadak know kaih and rilla was in prison,he wanted to kill Gog,but he isn’t succed,and Gog killed him.
Gog very angry,he want to destroy earth.
Captain of spaceship OM-45—sern saved kaih and rilla.and then Adai took them to the Moon.
Story is conclude.what will become of the earth?
After the story,I think,we should protect our environment,protect our planet.
In our life,we shouldn’t leave litter.we should protection of water resources.We should do more things to protect our planet.
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检查英语作文After the story”Under The Moon”This is a Science fiction about the earth.Kaih and rilla are leading actor.There are working in spaceship OM-45.One day,the satellite gave some diffenert number about the AOL.they found the AOL is
你的作文错误之处(按顺序):
1 actor -> actors
2 There -> They
3 number->numbers (复数)
4 时态错误:
改成
was breaking
was at risk
wanted to
and talked...
(下面的动词原形出都应该用过去时态,因为发生于文章中的"过去")
5 the commander of Earth -> the commander of the Earth (地球要加不定冠词,下同)
6 on earth (究竟)-> on the earth (在地球上)
7 is the richest...on earth 可以简写:is the richest and worst man on the earth
8 has found -> found(过去时)
9 the Gog -> Gog (人名不用冠词)
10 angil -> angry
11 why...did -> why did...do
12 Mars -> the Mars
13 after talk -> after talking
14 isn't succed -> didn't succeed
15 Gog very angry -> Gog was very angry
16 conclude -> concluded
17 we should protect,protect...-> we should protect,and protect...
18 protection of -> take protection of

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