帮我看看这篇作文的语法上有没有错误.Yesterday I went to climb the mountain with my father,our car stopped at a very high at the foot of the mountain,that is when two o’clock.At ten past two,we started to climbing the mountain,the mo

帮我看看这篇作文的语法上有没有错误.Yesterday I went to climb the mountain with my father,our car stopped at a very high at the foot of the mountain,that is when two o’clock.At ten past two,we started to climbing the mountain,the mo
帮我看看这篇作文的语法上有没有错误.
Yesterday I went to climb the mountain with my father,our car stopped at a very high at the foot of the mountain,that is when two o’clock.
At ten past two,we started to climbing the mountain,the mountain was very steep.Two hours later,we climbed up the top of the mountain.We were very happy.The mountain’s air was very fresh,and the scenery was very beautiful,i was very happy.
I like the mountains,I like the trip.

帮我看看这篇作文的语法上有没有错误.Yesterday I went to climb the mountain with my father,our car stopped at a very high at the foot of the mountain,that is when two o’clock.At ten past two,we started to climbing the mountain,the mo
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　　Yesterday Iwent to climb the mountain (爬山是一种活动,需要用 went climbing to themountain with my father,(逗号要改为句号或分号) our carstopped (parked) at a very high (删除 very)at the foot of the mountain,that is when two o’clock (改为由 when引导时间状语从句 when it was two o’clock).
　　At ten pasttwo,we started to climbing the mountain (改为开始具体行为的 started同climb),(改为句号) themountain was very steep (山势险峻仍然是现在的情况,改为现在时态).Twohours later,we climbed up (添加介词 to表示向上爬到山顶) the topof the mountain.We were very happy.The mountain’s air (mountain无生命,不用所有格形式) was veryfresh,and the scenery was very beautiful,I was very happy (与前文重复,改为“我尽情享受”).
　　I like themountains,I like the trip.
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　　Yesterday Iwent climbing to themountain with my father; our car stopped at a high at the foot of the mountain,when it was two o’clock.
　　At ten pasttwo,we started to climb the mountain.The mountain is very steep.Two hourslater,we climbed up to the top of the mountain.We were very happy.The air onthe mountaintop was very fresh,and the scenery was very beautiful,I enjoyed itas much as I like.
　　I like the mountains,I like the trip.

our car stopped at a very high at the foot of the mountain
按句述 stop at +宾语 介词+名词；介宾当地点状语
a very high at the foot of the mountain应该是名词词组
那么这个词组的中心词是什么
,that is when two o’clock.
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our car stopped at a very high at the foot of the mountain
按句述 stop at +宾语 介词+名词；介宾当地点状语
a very high at the foot of the mountain应该是名词词组
那么这个词组的中心词是什么
,that is when two o’clock.
when two o’clock.做 is 的表语，那么连词后表示的是从句 ，那么至少要有基本的主谓结构
started to 这里的to 是介词还是不定式，to一般当介词的是动词短语的固定搭配
we climbed up the top of the mountain 这里up的使用是否合理 一般这里的介宾是地点状语
在时态的表述上 举例
I am a teachen, 我是老师
I was a teacher. 我是老师（过去是，现在不是）
句中用了大量的过去时态 可能是受了一开始的Yesterday影响，
那么句中的现在时态的表述 是以什么来判定。。

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my father,our car 。。。这个地方不能用逗号，要用句号否则是杂糅句
at a very high。。。这个删掉
,that is when two o’clock.。。。改成when it is two o'clock
started to climbing。。。改成climb
mountain,the mountain......逗号变句号

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my father,our car 。。。这个地方不能用逗号，要用句号否则是杂糅句
at a very high。。。这个删掉
,that is when two o’clock.。。。改成when it is two o'clock
started to climbing。。。改成climb
mountain,the mountain......逗号变句号
beautiful,i was ...。。。逗号变句号
mountains, I like the。。。。。逗号变句号
辛苦写的，望采纳哦

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Yesterday I went to climb the mountain with my father,our car stopped at a very high at the foot of the mountain,that is when two o’clock.
At ten past two,we started to climbing the mountain,the m...

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Yesterday I went to climb the mountain with my father,our car stopped at a very high at the foot of the mountain,that is when two o’clock.
At ten past two,we started to climbing the mountain,the mountain was very steep. Two hours later, we climbed up the top of the mountain.We were very happy. The mountain’s air was very fresh, and the scenery was very beautiful,i was very happy.
I like the mountains, I like the trip

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