英语改错高手进,急用,When I was 5,my father bought me the piano with all the money he had saved.Every day I practised playing it though my father demanded.But before long,I transferred my interest in the piano to some other thing so I began t

英语改错高手进,急用,When I was 5,my father bought me the piano with all the money he had saved.Every day I practised playing it though my father demanded.But before long,I transferred my interest in the piano to some other thing so I began t
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When I was 5,my father bought me the piano with all the money he had saved.Every day I practised playing it though my father demanded.But before long,I transferred my interest in the piano to some other thing so I began to avoid practise it.When my father realized this,he encouraged me,but was strict with me than before.With her help,I went the hardest time and made great progress.Here I sincere express my gratitude to my father.On the journey of life,our parents have lit the light of hope for us.What they have done broaden our horizon.No one deserves bigger thanks than to our parents.

英语改错高手进,急用,When I was 5,my father bought me the piano with all the money he had saved.Every day I practised playing it though my father demanded.But before long,I transferred my interest in the piano to some other thing so I began t
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When I was 5 years old，my father bought me the piano with all the money he had saved.Every day I practised playing it as my father's demand.But before long,I transferred my interest to some other thin...

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When I was 5 years old，my father bought me the piano with all the money he had saved.Every day I practised playing it as my father's demand.But before long,I transferred my interest to some other things so I began to refuse to practise it.When my father realized this,he encouraged me,but was more strict with me than before.With his help,I went through the hardest times and made great progress.Here I sincerely express my gratitude to my father.On the journey of life,our parents have lit the light of hope for us.What they have done have broaden our horizon.No one deserves more great thanks than our parents.
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When I was 5，my father bought me the piano with all the money he had saved.Every day I practised playing it as my father demanded.But before long,I transferred my interest to some other thing, so I be...

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When I was 5，my father bought me the piano with all the money he had saved.Every day I practised playing it as my father demanded.But before long,I transferred my interest to some other thing, so I began to avoid practising it.When my father realized this,he encouraged me,but he was strict with me than before.With his help,I went through the hardest time and made great progress.Here I sincerely express my gratitude to my father.On the journey of life,our parents light the light of hope for us.What they have done broaden our horizon.No one deserves bigger thanks than our parents.
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When i was 5,my father bought me a piano with all the money he had saved.Everyday I practising playing it as my father demanded.But before long,I transferred my interest in the piano to some other thi...

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When i was 5,my father bought me a piano with all the money he had saved.Everyday I practising playing it as my father demanded.But before long,I transferred my interest in the piano to some other things so I began to avoid to practise it .When my father realized this,he encouraged me,but was stricter with me than before.With his help,i went the hardest time and made great progress.Here i sincerely express my gratitude to my father.On the journey of life,our parents have lit the light of hope for us.What they have done broadens our horizon.No one deserve bigger thanks than out parents.

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