请帮我改篇英文短文,有单词、标点、长句改短句.Thank you very much for your letter of 15 January,which we received today.In answer to your enquiry we have pleasure in enclosing an information pack,giving full details of our services

请帮我改篇英文短文,有单词、标点、长句改短句.Thank you very much for your letter of 15 January,which we received today.In answer to your enquiry we have pleasure in enclosing an information pack,giving full details of our services
请帮我改篇英文短文,有单词、标点、长句改短句.
Thank you very much for your letter of 15 January,which we received today.In answer to your enquiry we have pleasure in enclosing an information pack,giving full details of our services.If you would like any further information,do please contact me by phone or in writing and I will be pleased to help.I hope that our services will be of interest to you and I look forward to hearing from you.
Yours sincerely,
找出的错误越多,加的分越多~

请帮我改篇英文短文,有单词、标点、长句改短句.Thank you very much for your letter of 15 January,which we received today.In answer to your enquiry we have pleasure in enclosing an information pack,giving full details of our services
WE thank you for your letter DATED 15 January,OF which we ONLY received today.In answerING to your enquiry,we ENCLOSED HEREWITH an information pack THAT EXPLAINS our services IN FULL DETAIL.If you NEED any further information,please DO NOT HESITATE TO contact US and WE will be pleased to CLARIFY FOR YOU.WE hope YOU COULD BE BENEFITED BY our services and WE look forward to hearing from you SOON.
Yours sincerely,
原文没有太多错处,不过在商场上写的信,还是我帮你改的比较恰当.

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Thank you very much for your letter of 15 January, which we received today。
改为：
Thank you very much for your letter, received today, on January 15th.
第二句：
In answer to your en...

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第一句：
Thank you very much for your letter of 15 January, which we received today。
改为：
Thank you very much for your letter, received today, on January 15th.
第二句：
In answer to your enquiry we have pleasure in enclosing an information pack, giving full details of our services.
改为：
In answer to your enquiry, we are pleasure to enclose an information package, including full details of our sevices.
第三句：
If you would like any further information, do please contact me by phone or in writing and I will be pleased to help.
改为：
If you need any further information, please contact me by phone or letter. I'll be pleased to help you.
第四句：
I hope that our services will be of interest to you and I look forward to hearing from you.
改为：
I hope that our services will be helpful to you.
And I am looking forward to hearing from you.

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第一句：
Thank you very much for your letter of 15 January, which we received today。
改为：
Thank you very much for your letter, received today, on January 15th.
第二句：
In answer to yo...

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第一句：
Thank you very much for your letter of 15 January, which we received today。
改为：
Thank you very much for your letter, received today, on January 15th.
第二句：
In answer to your enquiry we have pleasure in enclosing an information pack, giving full details of our services.
改为：
In answer to your enquiry, we are pleasure to enclose an information package, including full details of our sevices.
第三句：
If you would like any further information, do please contact me by phone or in writing and I will be pleased to help.
改为：
If you need any further information, please contact me by phone or letter. I'll be pleased to help you.
第四句：
I hope that our services will be of interest to you and I look forward to hearing from you.
改为：
I hope that our services will be helpful to you.
And I am looking forward to hearing from you.
嗯,我希望你最好用这个o(∩_∩)o...哈哈

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