英语作文评析,请帮助指出错误,正文如下,Xiao Ming is a good student,he loves learning new things very much.He usually reading many new things about news,sports,geography,biology,history…… But he doesn’t have a good reading custom,

英语作文评析,请帮助指出错误,正文如下,Xiao Ming is a good student,he loves learning new things very much.He usually reading many new things about news,sports,geography,biology,history…… But he doesn’t have a good reading custom,
英语作文评析,请帮助指出错误,正文如下,
Xiao Ming is a good student,he loves learning new things very much.He usually reading many new things about news,sports,geography,biology,history…… But he doesn’t have a good reading custom,for examples:He likes reading when he is walking; eating meals and sleeping in the bed.
Today,Xiao Ming went to physical examination,but his eyes can’t see what’s the things on the board……

英语作文评析,请帮助指出错误,正文如下,Xiao Ming is a good student,he loves learning new things very much.He usually reading many new things about news,sports,geography,biology,history…… But he doesn’t have a good reading custom,
Xiao Ming is a good student,he loves learning new things very much.He usually reading 【reads】many new things about news,sports,geography,biology,history…… But he doesn’t have a good reading custom,for examples:【,】 He likes reading【to read】 when he is walking; eating meals and sleeping in the【去掉the】 bed.
Today,Xiao Ming went to 【加上a】physical examination,but his eyes can’t see what’s the things on the board……【最后一句改为but he can't see the words on the board】

1、两分句间要添加相应的连词或将其中一句改为另一句的从句。Xiao Ming is a good student, he loves learning new things very much. 改为：Ming is a good student, and he loves learning new things very much.
2、He usually reading many...

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1、两分句间要添加相应的连词或将其中一句改为另一句的从句。Xiao Ming is a good student, he loves learning new things very much. 改为：Ming is a good student, and he loves learning new things very much.
2、He usually reading many new things about news, sports, geography, biology, history…… usually 表示的是一般情况，因而要用一般现在时；另外，new things about news 在逻辑上有点怪；此外，英语中的省略号只有3个点，若想更地道，建议用词组and so on
改为：He usually reads many new things about sports, geography, biology, history and so on.
3、But he doesn’t have a good reading custom, for examples: He likes reading when he is walking; eating meals and sleeping in the bed.此处，举例可以另起一句；另外英语中没有冒号，需要用到冒号的地方改用逗号。
改为：But he doesn’t have a good reading custom. For examples, he likes reading when he is walking, eating meals and sleeping in the bed.
4、最后一句和前面提到的是因果关系，所以为了令文章的逻辑性更突出，可以加上表示因果关系的连词及其词组，如as a result,so;另外，去考物理，已经是过去的事，所以要用过去时，can't改为couldn't；最后,what 是疑问代词，是一种代词，后一分句可以省略the things
As a result, yesterday Xiao Ming went to physical examination, but his eyes couldn’t see what’s on the board.
总评：此文行文流畅，逻辑性强，用词准确，以七年级的英语水平而言，是一篇不错的文章。但对于英语表达中一些常规知识的不清楚，容易造成语法错误，平时在做阅读时多多留意即可。另外，时态问题是一直到大学甚至工作都有可能犯的错误，望日后写完作文后都仔细检查这方面的问题。

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