英语作文评析（七年级水平） 正文如下 Today,it was a sunny day.Wang Hua went to the Central Park.There are many people are rowing boats in the lake.Suddenly,a small girl few down in the water.Wang Ming didn’t know how to swim,but he

英语作文评析（七年级水平） 正文如下 Today,it was a sunny day.Wang Hua went to the Central Park.There are many people are rowing boats in the lake.Suddenly,a small girl few down in the water.Wang Ming didn’t know how to swim,but he
英语作文评析（七年级水平） 正文如下
Today,it was a sunny day.Wang Hua went to the Central Park.There are many people are rowing boats in the lake.Suddenly,a small girl few down in the water.Wang Ming didn’t know how to swim,but he jumped in to the water and picked small girl up to the boat.The girl was very grate to him.

英语作文评析（七年级水平） 正文如下 Today,it was a sunny day.Wang Hua went to the Central Park.There are many people are rowing boats in the lake.Suddenly,a small girl few down in the water.Wang Ming didn’t know how to swim,but he
时态上来讲,运用过去式其实可以,因为记录的是一天中的事.当然,用一般现也行（也就是你现在用的这个事态）.
There are many people are rowing boats in the lake.——There are 的“are”若是全篇用过去式,可改为“were”“.若是一般现,则不变.“people“后面的“are”去掉.
Suddenly,a small girl few down in the water——这里的“few"应该是“fall”,如果你全篇采用过去式,那么则把“few”改为“fell”.如果全篇用的一般现,则改为“falls”（三人称单数）.此外,“down”改为“into”.因为是掉入水中,介词很形象,“入”就用“into”.“the water”的“the”可以不要.
but he jumped in to ------”jumped“是过去式就不变,一般现就改为“jumps;'.“in”和“to”应该连起来用作“into”
to the boat-------“the”改为“a”好些,因为这个“船”前面没有提到,“the”有时候表示强调.
The girl was very grate to him.——“grate”改为“grateful”.对某人心存感激,用短语“be grateful to "
总的来说,文章意思还是明朗的.就是有点失态混乱.要么就全部用过去式,要么就全部用一般现.尽量不要一处过去式,一处一般现那样.很多时候,老师会很注意看文章时态,时态错误就很严重了.还有一些小问题,自己多注意以下.不懂的可以问问老师.以上供参考.

Today, it was 【注意全文时态，这里was应改为is】a sunny day. Wang Hua went 【时态错误，went改为goes】to the Central Park. There are many people are 【此处are删掉，一句话中若没有从句就不能出现两个be动词】rowing boats in the lake. Suddenly, a small gi...

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Today, it was 【注意全文时态，这里was应改为is】a sunny day. Wang Hua went 【时态错误，went改为goes】to the Central Park. There are many people are 【此处are删掉，一句话中若没有从句就不能出现两个be动词】rowing boats in the lake. Suddenly, a small girl few 【单词错误，改为falls】down in 【词组错误，down in改为into】the water. Wang Ming didn’t【时态错误，改为doesn't】 know how to swim【建议此句改为Wang Ming can't swim】, but he jumped【时态错误，==|||你到底用过去式还是现在时，建议还是全文改成过去式……】 in to 【此处in和to合并成一个单词into】the water and picked small girl up to the boat. The girl was very grate 【词组错误，grate改为grateful（词组为be grateful to sb.）】to him.
总评：全文时态有点混乱，建议全改为过去式。

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There are many people（ are）【删掉】 rowing boats in the lake.
few down 是fell down