我要用英文自我介绍希望有高人能帮我改正改正....I'am Peter,the youngest between the two children in my family.I'am silent,I selldom to talk with other,but I like listioning what are they talking about.I'm helpful and patient.I alwa

我要用英文自我介绍希望有高人能帮我改正改正....I'am Peter,the youngest between the two children in my family.I'am silent,I selldom to talk with other,but I like listioning what are they talking about.I'm helpful and patient.I alwa
我要用英文自我介绍希望有高人能帮我改正改正....
I'am Peter,the youngest between the two children in my family.I'am silent,I selldom to talk with other,but I like listioning what are they talking about.I'm helpful and patient.I always help my friend what can I do.(我的意思:只要我能帮我都会帮) They alwys play a trick on me.I just smile.I like watching movie as love story,funny and natural.I always thinking but I don't like it.I can not control my mind.I love free.My dream is buy a beautiful house in good place where have hill,lake and trees around it.

我要用英文自我介绍希望有高人能帮我改正改正....I'am Peter,the youngest between the two children in my family.I'am silent,I selldom to talk with other,but I like listioning what are they talking about.I'm helpful and patient.I alwa
个人感觉你这个太别扭了,我给小改了一下,更口语化一点
I'am Peter.I am the younger one in my family.I'am silent boy.and comparing talking I would rather listioning to the others silently.I'm also a warm hearted boy,always try to help on my best.They alwys play a trick on me.(这句我没明白你是想说什么,是说你的朋友经常戏弄你,骗你吗.trick这个词基本上是个贬义词) but I just smile it away.
I like watching movies especially those with humour,love or natural.
And I always keep thinking,pondering and musing,and I cannot stop even sometimes I don't really like it.(这句话也没太看明白,是不是想说,我总是不停地思考,而且无法停止.)
I love to be free.(不要用楼上说的freedom,这个词太重了,看过“勇敢的心”和“爱国者”没,那才能叫freedom,举例来说,假如你是个爱尔兰共和军闹独立,那你的愿望才真能叫做freedom)
My dream is have(我个人感觉“拥有”要比“购买”显得不那么功利,要不喜欢可以自己改过来) a beautiful house surrounded by profect view,like on a hill by the lake with woods around.

1. I'am 有两种改法I am ，I'm（表示我是...）
2. the youngest between the two children in my family最高级是三者及以上，用比较级就可以，the younger one in my family(比较级就指两者，不用再强调两个孩子即可)
3.I selldom to talk with other，把to去掉 ot...

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1. I'am 有两种改法I am ，I'm（表示我是...）
2. the youngest between the two children in my family最高级是三者及以上，用比较级就可以，the younger one in my family(比较级就指两者，不用再强调两个孩子即可)
3.I selldom to talk with other，把to去掉 other改成others
I like listioning what are they talking about改为I like listening to what they talk about(listen to表示听，后面说话不用进行时态即可)
4.I always help my friend what can I do改为I always help my friends wherever I can 或I always help my friends as much as I can.
5.I like watching movie as love story, funny and natural可以改为I like watching movies on love ,fun and nature.
6.I always thinking but I don't like it改为I always think but I don't like it.
7.I love free改为 I love freedom（自由要用名词）
8.My dream is buy a beautiful house in good place where have hill,lake and trees around it 改为My dream is to buy a beautiful house in a good place where there is hills,lakes and trees around my house. （动词不能直接做表语，要用不定式。place可数名词所以需要不定冠词，后面的定语从句用have表示有不准确，故改为了there be句式）
希望对你有用。

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