给我纠正一下英语作文的语法错误行么,There are a lot of the love of my parents,are innumerable,remember also can not finish.However,there is one thing I remember.One morning,I suddenly feel sick,mom and Dad took me to the hospital.The

给我纠正一下英语作文的语法错误行么,There are a lot of the love of my parents,are innumerable,remember also can not finish.However,there is one thing I remember.One morning,I suddenly feel sick,mom and Dad took me to the hospital.The
给我纠正一下英语作文的语法错误行么,
There are a lot of the love of my parents,are innumerable,remember also can not finish.However,there is one thing I remember.
One morning,I suddenly feel sick,mom and Dad took me to the hospital.The doctor said I had a high fever,must hit a bit,take some medicine.Although I know injection is painful,I endured the pain.In these days,mom and Dad had a hard time to take care of me:to comfort me,encourage me,take medicine when feeding me medicine,often ask me hungry,thirsty.After these days of mom and Dad take care,my disease improved day by day,
This is a very small thing,but deeply reflects the love of my parents.

给我纠正一下英语作文的语法错误行么,There are a lot of the love of my parents,are innumerable,remember also can not finish.However,there is one thing I remember.One morning,I suddenly feel sick,mom and Dad took me to the hospital.The
（1）love不可数,且there be句型用就近原则,所以第一句的are改为is 如下：There is a lot of the love of my parents.
(2)逗号前后的东西可有修饰关系,所以第二句中的are可以去掉直接使用形容词 如下：innumerable
（3） 逗号前后的东西一定要有联系,故第三句的 remember 动词原形不能对单独使用,如2所说需要表修饰,且这里为主动记住 如下：remembering also can not finish.
（4）Mum大写
（5）删去of mom and Dad take care,
（6）improve 为提高的意思 disease 为疾病的意思 故最后两句不能说疾病一天一天地提高 所以改为 如下：My disease left me a way day by day【我的病一天天离我更远了】

There are a lot of the love of my parents,which are innumerable,I can't remember every single detail . However, there is one thing I remember.
One morning, I suddenly felt sick, mom and dad t...

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There are a lot of the love of my parents,which are innumerable,I can't remember every single detail . However, there is one thing I remember.
One morning, I suddenly felt sick, mom and dad took me to the hospital. The doctor said I had a high fever, so I must take anection,and take some medicine. Although I know injection is painful, I endured the pain. In these days, mom and dad had a hard time taking care of me, comforting me, encouraging me, tasting medicine before feeding me , asking me if I'm hungry or thirsty.After these days of mom and dad taking care, my disease improved day by day.
This is a very small thing, but it deeply reflects the love of my parents.

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Problems:

• repetitive meaning

• past tense please

• Plural nouns!

• gerund
  

I changed it like this.

the innumerable love of my parents can never vanish. In particular, there is one thing I remember.

In a morning, I suddenly felt sick so my mom and Dad took me to the hospital. The doctor said I had got a serious fever which needs( needs is used as it is fact) some medicines. Although I know injection is painful, I endured to overcome the pain. During these days, mom and Dad had a hard time taking care of me , comforting , encouraging ,feeding me with medicines, asking me if I were hungry, thirsty...... After these days of  care, my illness improved day by day.

This is a very small thing, but it deeply reflects the love of my parents.

The innumerable love from my parents is hard to express. Particularlly, there is one thing I remember that shares this.
In a morning, I suddenly felt sick so my Mom and Dad took me to the hospital...

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The innumerable love from my parents is hard to express. Particularlly, there is one thing I remember that shares this.
In a morning, I suddenly felt sick so my Mom and Dad took me to the hospital. The doctor said that I had a serious fever, therefore an intravenous drip and some medicine was required. Although injection might make me painful, I endured it eventually. In those days, Mom and Dad had a time taking care of me, comforting me, encouraging me and feeding me with medicines. After a few days being through all these, I gradually recovered.
This is an experience, ordinary, but deeply reflects the love of my parents for me.

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