帮我看看这篇英语作文有什么错误以及不妥,Thanks
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帮我看看这篇英语作文有什么错误以及不妥,Thanks
帮我看看这篇英语作文有什么错误以及不妥,Thanks
帮我看看这篇英语作文有什么错误以及不妥,Thanks
以下数字为句子顺序.
第1段：
1.(numbers don't emerge)----The number of museums which offer free admission has risen/mounted all over the country.
2.The news is as desirable as its aim is clear.(crystal is redundant)
3.去掉always,可以改成often/usually; (with passion for what?) 可以改为with passion for learning/history/archeology...; 加s:on the museum doors (plural because you haven't specify anything); due to economic factor
4.gives rise to the emergence of free-admission museums (去掉the),或者gives rise to the necessity of creating more free-admission museums
5.第5句可以和第4句合并:emergence of free-admission museums which naturally cater to the curiosity of these young vistors.
第2段：
1.(as well as what?) 直接去掉as well或者改成as well as benefits.
2.很好,没错.就是忘了加句号.
3.which前面去掉逗号; 建议可以在impede前面加may,但也可以不用; (there's no such thing as heritages) these sites of cultural heritage/these cultural heritage sites
4.according to one museum curator/according to museum curators; 建议改成present tense,allow their children (从上下文来说更通顺些）
第3段：
1.In my opinion,since every coin has two sides,we should also assess rationally the shortcomings of free admissions (in museums).
2.在after all前面加上however/yet; 去掉in; the advantages of free admissions outweigh its disadvantages (你忘了加s).
3.(meanwhile?你想说什么?) 改meanwhile为in addition/furthermore; basic (no words exists as ‘basical'); (how is familiarity with culture a part of 'stepping into society'?) 建议将stepping into society改成our education.