看看我的 英文自我介绍 Good morning!My name is Lili.It is really my honor to have this opportunity for an interview.Now I will introduce myself briefly.I have work in restaurant for 10 years.All those experiences contributed much to the deve

看看我的 英文自我介绍 Good morning!My name is Lili.It is really my honor to have this opportunity for an interview.Now I will introduce myself briefly.I have work in restaurant for 10 years.All those experiences contributed much to the deve
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Good morning!My name is Lili.
It is really my honor to have this opportunity for an interview.Now I will introduce myself briefly.
I have work in restaurant for 10 years.All those experiences contributed much to the development and promotion of my organizing and social abilities.
I think I'm a good team player and I'm a person of great honesty to others.Also I am able to work under great pressure.
A position with your company would be both a learning experience and a great opportunity.I look forward to becoming part of the team.
That’s all.Thank you.
只是简单的介绍.主要想看看要不要加些语气词,或者有什么不符合语言习惯的地方

看看我的 英文自我介绍 Good morning!My name is Lili.It is really my honor to have this opportunity for an interview.Now I will introduce myself briefly.I have work in restaurant for 10 years.All those experiences contributed much to the deve
Good morning!My name is Lili.
It is my great honor to get this opportunity for the interview.Now I will introduce myself briefly.
I have worked in restaurant for 10 years.Well,all the experience contributed much to the development and promotion of my organizing and social abilities.
I think I'm a good team player and I will show my honest to others.Also I am able to work under numerous and heavy pressure.
Frankly speaking,going into your company would be both learning experience and a great opportunity.Im looking forward to becoming a part of the team.
Thank you so much.
千万不要在这么正式的场合说that's all 很搞笑的,听起来
老外每次听到这个都笑起没完,等同于你在一段演讲过后说,仅此而已,或是我说完了

第三行 work 改worked
其他没有什么太大的问题。有问题你也不好改，主要是不那么地道，其实也不存在问题，估计面试你的人也是中国人。没有问题的

I have been working in a restaurant for 10 years
A position your company provides
其他的还不错

I have work in restaurant for 10 years 中的时态不对，改为 现在完成进行时
I have been working in the restaurant for 10 years
再有，写文章尽量用简洁的话来表达，而且一定要符合语法等英文习惯，祝你英语更棒！

问题不是很大 还行 但总感觉哪里有些不对

第一段，an interview 改成the interview，因为是特指此次面试。
第二段，I have work 改为 I have been working。 experience不用复数。abilities改为skills。
第三段，I think多余了，你说的话当然就是你认为的。I'm a person of great honesty to others有些啰嗦了，直...

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第一段，an interview 改成the interview，因为是特指此次面试。
第二段，I have work 改为 I have been working。 experience不用复数。abilities改为skills。
第三段，I think多余了，你说的话当然就是你认为的。I'm a person of great honesty to others有些啰嗦了，直接说I'm a honest person. 或者说I'm trustable.
第四段，a position with your company 改为working in your company.
另外，如果你是口头介绍而不是书面介绍，语句可以更简洁一些。让被人清楚地了解你的能力和你的意向。用复杂的句子反而增加了被人的理解负担。

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Good morning！My name is Lili.
It is my great honor to take this opportunity for the interview. Please allow me to give a brief introduction.
I have been in restaurants for 10 years (不知...

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Good morning！My name is Lili.
It is my great honor to take this opportunity for the interview. Please allow me to give a brief introduction.
I have been in restaurants for 10 years (不知道你是否想表述在餐饮业十年了?). All those experiences contributed much to the development and promotion of my organizing and social abilities.
I'm a good team player and a person of great honesty to others. Also I am able to work under great pressure.
A position with your company would be both a learning experience and a great opportunity. I look forward to becoming part of the team.
Thank you.
你这个自我介绍从整体上来讲很生硬,完全是中文思维的表述,所以我认为你还需要多花些心思重新组织一下,祝你好运!

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I have work 加个ed
A position with your company would be both a learning experience and a great opportunity 中文什么意思？

Good morning！My name is Lili.
It is really my honor to have this opportunity for the(an改为the) interview. Now please let me（I will改为please let me，显得有礼貌）introduce myself briefly.
I have ...

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Good morning！My name is Lili.
It is really my honor to have this opportunity for the(an改为the) interview. Now please let me（I will改为please let me，显得有礼貌）introduce myself briefly.
I have worked in a（work要用过去分词） restaurant for 10 years.All these experience（省去s。experience做“经验”时，不可数）has（宜用完成时，与上句呼应） contributed much to the development and promotion of my organizing and social abilities.
I think I'm a good team player and I'm a person of great honesty and responsibility（to others去掉，改为responsibility责任心 。Besides（Also改为besides） I am able to work under great pressure.
A position of（with改为of） your company would be both a learning experience and a great opportunity to me（加上to me）. I hope（look forward to改为hope）to become a member（part改为member） of your（the改为your） team.
That’s all. Thank you.

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It is really my honor
really 副词感觉有点怪，
have work(ed) in (a)restaurant for ten years.(what is your major job/responsibility?)后面一句有点汗。。
I've got good team work spirit and also able to work u...

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It is really my honor
really 副词感觉有点怪，
have work(ed) in (a)restaurant for ten years.(what is your major job/responsibility?)后面一句有点汗。。
I've got good team work spirit and also able to work under presure.

....感觉要写的东西还很多吧，
“ A position with your company would be both a learning experience and a great opportunity. I look forward to becoming part of the team. “ 这个自我介绍的时候不用，应该是面试的人问你的时候才需要。。句子好像也不是太对劲

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